Reviews for Embodiment of the Crimson Demon
mateguy3 chapter 7 . 12/28/2019
Based on the information and the multitude of things that were implied, Kallen time traveled from the Canon time-line, but the 'live wire' part seems to suggest this isn't the second timeline. It would explain Kallen's behavior, although the real question is, how many times has Kallen tried to save Lelouch and failed?
Cruril chapter 1 . 9/24/2019
This is always a good story to come back and read for a laugh. Yandere Kallen is best kallen
Orakle chapter 1 . 12/23/2017
Very good story, too bad It died.
Guest chapter 8 . 7/28/2017
it's bin over a year since u updated the story! y u no update?!
Senju Sowdowwen chapter 3 . 7/4/2017
Kallen - Travel time?

Elle connait le futur et essaie de le changer?
Guest chapter 5 . 6/16/2017
Wow... Suzaku really channelling his inner Dumbledore right here. All he's missing is "For the GREATER GOOD!"
guhgiog08e9rhiogoiheg98whgiogo chapter 8 . 5/3/2017
Great story, hope you decide to continue it!
Cruril chapter 8 . 5/2/2017
Great story so far can't wait to see where it goes!
fallenthantos chapter 4 . 1/10/2017
You know after reading these chapters I'm going to guess kallens backstory is that she timetraveled back after the zero requiem and is desperate to save lelouch, it would make sense why she new several things that were going to happen, locations, and perhaps most convincing her killing nu while talking about her husband (ohigi) I would almost expect he'll have and unfortuante accident soon after for his betrayal during the series.
Dragonheart Of Ireland chapter 8 . 10/6/2016
Please update the next chapter soon because I like this story!
Bananarock509 chapter 8 . 9/23/2016
I'm worried about how Kallen will deal with the fact that C.C. Is reporting everything she does to Marianne...
GUEST chapter 8 . 5/24/2016
This Kallen seems to be based on Yuno Gasai, theres clearly a time travel element, geass immunity could be that she was targeted by Lelouchs Geass in the past or that the time travel itself granted her some form of immunity, or she could have her own Geass abolity that grants her immunity, she could even be a Code Bearer.
Interesting story, though I do wish it would move a little bit faster.
Republic chapter 8 . 5/15/2016
It's been a while since the last update. Anyways, the next chapter will probably be even more amazing!
Guest chapter 4 . 5/5/2016
Again, I'm torn; I love the idea of a yandere Kallen. I do, really. I think you write action scenes pretty well for someone who claims not to be into writing them(and really, how can you write a good Code Geass fic that DOESN'T have Knightmare combat? it's such a huge part of the manga and anime).

BUT... I am just amazed at the disconnect when it comes to describing scenes and then the dialogue which feels so very out of character. For practically every character. Kallen swearing up a storm is one thing but Orange acting like a Saturday morning cartoon villain?

And what was with Kallen not just ending him right off the bat? Kallen being a bad-ass pilot is more than welcome in my book, but useless maneuvers like she performed here with her flipping all over the place that supposedly no one else could do, what was the point of that? And the alias dropping? Why?

Also, from a logical standpoint, wouldn't it have made more sense for Lelouche to be seated and Kallen on his lap? I mean, she's piloting the Sutherland and his head would get in the way... not to mention, she said she'd be his knight - with him in front of her he becomes a meat shield. And, wouldn't little miss yandere just love the feeling of her obsession's body being pressed into her, holding onto her drive her already unstable mind through crazy little pink-heart shaped loops?

Don't get me wrong, by and large I'm enjoying this fic. I just wanted to point out a few things.
Guest chapter 3 . 5/5/2016
Well, I'm a bit torn. You're very good with prose but I find your actual character interaction when it comes to speech is... slightly below average.

The main thing being on that latter front is the injection of Japanese bits like the '-kun', 'Ara' and the 'hai hai'. It just kind of removes the gravity of the situation; almost makes the situation less dire, more of a joke or something along those lines.

Now I get this is whole different breed of Kallen; but it's hard to continue to be portayed as the sometimes menacing and unhinged type when she's falling into those verbal ticks - I mean, so far, she's the only one who speaks like that so it just seems... odd.
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