It's sure got MY attention. Do you have ANY idea how hard it is to find a harem fanfic for this franchise that DOESN'T involve a male oc as the protagonist, but a FEMALE one instead? Really friggin hard, that's how. So, in a way, you basically gave me something I've been looking forward to for quite some time now. I mean, sure I'd have wanted it to be lemon, but at this point, I'll take what I can get. So PLEASE, do us all a favor and upload some more chapters for this, m'kay? I REALLY wanna see how this plays out.

Okay, I agree with you about male OC characters/harem (especially when that hasn't really changed for three years), however, putting a girl instead of a boy doesn't change anything because the issue isn't that the OC is a guy. Two examples :

The Shinobi of light : Why that story isn't great ? Because the character is Mary Sue as hell, and that would be the same is he was a girl.
Shinovi lovers : Why is pure shit ? Because it's just a hentai about nothing (and very sick) and one more time, it would be the same with a girl instead of the boy.

However, your character (Ayu) is pretty good, so, I think I will continue to read this story.

By the way, There are two inconstitencies in this chapter :
1- Asuka doesn't use katana but wakizashi.
2- Please, remember that... Shinobi DON'T USE THEIR REAL NAMES ! They use shinobi names (like code names), that is why we never hear any family name in games.

Well, well, you two~

And thank goodness he did, Yuri-chan~ Thank goodness Jojo-san suggested and convinced you to write this~ (Chuckles)

My goodness, this was fun~ This was so much badass fun~! Like, wow. *O* Such badass choreography for both a one-on-one duel and~a little sniper VS revolver gun battle~ My goodness~

Ikaruga sure taught Ayu some humility, and I'd say her lesson was learned~ And Ayu VS the Ryo twins...well, wow, it was quite evident whooo had the~most fun in that part. ;D And also...*sand bombs*, hmmmm? Ohhh I wonder whoooo Ayu got that move from~ XD

Also...Ryona~ XD Ryona, oh Ryona~ Ryobi's darling Baka Inu~ XD Dat booty, indeed~ Dat Ryona booty that Ayu grazed with dat .44 Magnum round, amirite? LOL

And also...Katsuragi~ Oh Katsuragi~ No-one is safe~ No-one is safe~! Ayu will learn to looove Kats' hands on her boobies soon enough, I have no doubt~ ;D

Great work, you two~! This was wonderful! I know this can only get better! *O*

Semper-Fi! Carry on!

I am surprised and pleased that you have decided to continue this. I will admit, while the Ryo Twins are fine rivals for Ayu, I wouldn’t have minded seeing you create a rival for her that’s not a canon character.

Still, glad to see you conclude her first lesson against her upperclassman. And then get the Katsuragi treatment :3

Well, after reading what you have so far, I've come to really like this. Ayu is a real cutie with a charming personality and a no-quit attitude that makes you what to root for her. She still has much to learn, as her fights with Ikaruga and the Ryo sisters indicate, but I have a feeling she'll make it through. I mean, she was able to earn the respect of the Ryo twins and even managed to get on speaking terms and learn a few things from a fellow gunslinger. And it looks like Ikaruga is starting to warm up to her. So things should be fine.

Overall, I'm liking how the story is progressing so far. I look forward to seeing what other adventures and shenanigans our cute little gunslinger gets herself into.

Until then, DA SAGA CONTINUES!

Peace out.

Wowee...she's already managed to summon her animal spirit?! Sounds like a Mary Sue to me : / ahhhh jk, jk. Please don't get mad at me for saying that xP

So Ikaruga wants to test her already...dang what a hardass. I wonder how this epic battle of noob vs boss goes? Hopefully you will update one day O_O

*nudge nudge*

So a sexy cowgirl, eh? You know what would REALLY make for a good outfit... assless chaps ;D

It seems that Ayu is able to hold her own against the other ninja girls. Not bad, not bad ;) and Katsu seems to have already taken a shine to her lmao.

Your OC is awesome! :) though I am a bit salty towards Erron Black, her inspiration, because he killed my boy Kobra! *angry face*

Well, well, Li'l Lily...

Well, for as simple a reason as Ikaruga's is here, simply to teach Ayu, the rookie, a lesson in humility like the veteran sempai that is, is a good and convincing reason.

Clearly, Ayu is quite good, but she may just be letting her current skills get to her head. So, Ikaruga's gotta knock her down a peg or two. LOL

Also, nice work on Ayu's animal spirit being a horse. It's fitting. Simple as that. :3 A cowgirl is really nothing without her trusty steed.

And then, dat quote at the end? LOL That was awesome. It always works, the "never bring a blade to a gunfight" saying. Hoo-rrah.

And also, well, clearly, Ikaruga ain't gonna open her heart to the rookie Harem Mistress just like that. Ayu's gotta fight for Ikaruga-sempai's love, amirite~? ;3

Nice work! Let's see who wins this match, eh? :3

Semper-Fi! Carry on!

Well, well, Li'l Lily...

(Removes his night vision goggles as he climbs up over the edge of a cliff) Kept you waiting, huh?

Now, my only "complaint" about thishere first chapter is that Ayu didn't spin her guns with needless flare nor made any awesome quotes like Revolver Ocelot from the "Metal Gear Solid" franchise. LOL But still, clearly, Ayu-chan here isn't "modeled" after Ocelot, but instead Erron Black from "Mortal Kombat X" and I'm just rambling here. LOL

Anyway!

Ayu is a lovely cutie with a really cool and international appeal: 2 handcannons and a katana. That's as cross-country as it gets. LOL

Also, the battle choreography for Ayu VS Asuka was really nice and just, cool. :3

So, meh, what the Hell. May as well. Mission Start!
Let's move on to the next!

Semper-Fi! Carry on!

Ok, I hope you haven't forgotten this story under all the other stories you released. On a personal note, I'm not a one-hundred percent fan of harem fics, but your OC is a lot cooler than the other harem OCs polluting fanfics. That said, I had an idea for another OC, which I think would be the main antagonist against Ayu. Basically, he'll be Erron Black (I'll call him "Black" for now in place of an original name), both in abilities (i.e. Trick-shotting coins, sand bombs, rifle, etc.), and background (ruthless mercenary who lived since the Wild West era).

What I have in mind will be pretty dark, with Black essentially acting as a Knight of Cerberus for the plot. It won't kill any of the Senran Kagura characters, but he will pose a nasty peril to Ayu and her friends.

Pretty cool start. FeMC is different and pretty good so far. Wonder what kinda plots gonna go down later..

FTW yuri harems are my favourite types of harems

You got me hooked on the Texan girl. I would love to hear more of Ayu and her cowgirl adventures with the girls.

I'm sure you will not tell us who is in the harem. But if you decide that your story will talk about the Estival Versus, could Jasmine be in? Find a way for her to be in.