Ooookaaay...

The main characters were all fleshed out. You took the time to make them real people with proper motivations and such. There was character growth on all sides.

On the other hand, no character was given as much time as I felt was needed. Sure they were getting fond if each other and all but I wasn’t getting fond of them. Each of them needed more time. The story was too fast paced. It should have had some more mundane stuff going on. Instead it was all highs and lows. One sexond they’re relaxing, the next they’re duking it out with some of the world’s strongest, then they’re recovering and already moving on to the next arc of the story and the cycle repeats.
I mentioned Naruto’s power in the previous reviews but I didn’t know what sort of story this was shaping up to be so you can ignore those.
EVERYBODY other than the main 6 were absolutely sidelined. Hell, I don’t think Kakashi ever said a word through it all, and if he did I don’t remember it.
Also sometimes it was really hard to find out what happened in the previous scene or what’s happening in the current scene. I still don’t know what happened to Sasuke, for one. That’s like, half the reason shippuden even happened in the first place.

In short, it was a great story but there was a voice in the back of my mind that was pointing out tiny little things that kept it from being brilliant.

Well... Madara’s dead and done with just like that. Don’t know how to feel about that. Obito’s a bigger idiot than in canon.

On another note, Yugito’s chakra cloak seems awesome.

Aaaand cue Naruto going ape shit...again. And it was going so well too. Well let’s hope he can actually do something this time around.

Naruto’s just acting like Shikamaru now: I know my faults and I acknowledge them, but I refuse to do anything about it. Only, Shikamaru doesn’t have the same goals Naruto does. He can afford to take things slow. Naruto needs to be more like Rock Lee, trying his best to make up for his faults.

Man, I’d forgotten how utterly infuriating early shippuden Naruto was. Too strong to pass as a genin and too weak to fight a jonin, which was where he needed to be.

I really like your work, and I'm hoping you would consider doing a Star wars fanfiction. Something in the genre of "The Gardener's Tale" And "The Path of Ruin". Less about an all powerful force god like Anakin, and instead an OC/SI story. Not too overpowered, but they get there. Anyways, I just wanted to say that I hope that whatever endeavors you might pursue, you succeed in. Have a Gentlemanly day!

Great story! Thanks for writing it. Good plot, flow, and well written. Going to have to look at your other stories

Best Madara characterization ever.

Right, tackling problems head-on and recklessly is the manly way. That explains why civilization exists oh wait no it doesn't. The fact civilization exists, diplomacy exists, discussion exists as practically an art form, etc. etc. etc. all proves that the man's way of solving problems is through thought and discussion with force as a last resort. Because all civilizations, societies, social structures, the organization there-of, art, science, negotiation, business, and everything else was invented and propagated by men.

Women generally solve problems either through a strictly democratic voting process of seeing how many people in a group agree with the same thing or by considering how they feel about something before deciding on the course of action they feel most comfortable with, regardless of whether or not it is logical or reasonable.

Are they all stupid? A tailed bug beast was quite clearly NOT what was sealed in Naruto. So their shit about "losing control" makes no sense at all. It should be obvious to everyone that something completely different than the Kyuubi occurred.

Right Naruto, you're not special...if you take away the things that make you special. Astounding logic.

Oh boo hoo. This is why almost every fan hates Iwa: they’re unprofessional asshat thugs who take everything personally and who blame anyone connected to anything they consider bad. And their idea of bad even includes defending yourself or your people when attacked by them.

Actually, if anyone has no idea what being a Jinchuuriki is like, it’s Yugito. Thanks to Bee, she was given the benefit of the doubt by Kumo. Not readily accepted, but open to proving herself, which she did. She didn’t actually suffer through what Bee and Naruto and the rest did.

Yet another writer who thinks Tsunade’s youth is a genjutsu. Am I the ONLY person who read the dang chapter and watched the dang episode in which her youth is EXPLAINED IN DETAIL!? It’s simple: the seal on her forehead stores medical chakra and uses that to heal her body from elements of aging. Essentially, she’s functionally immortal. When released, the seal feeds on her energy to supercharge her already immense power which causes her to rapidly age. Once the seal is, well, sealed again it “heals” the aging.

Sucks