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Loved it!

Thanks so much for writing this. The plot was good and it made for a very nice read.

Thank you so much for the fic. It was a very enjoyable read.

WHO are you and WHERE is my father

That shit got me laughing goddamn

Loved the story! Such a good read! I absolutely LOVED Adrien in the beginning! His jump to protecting her was SWOON-WORTHY

First, I’ll start with my compliments! I loved the plot of this fic. It was well thought out and it kept me engaged. Well done!

Now for some constructive criticism...
There were some grammatical, spelling, and punctuational issues with the fic.

For instance, grammar: you used the word “however” a-frickin-lot. I nearly stopped reading because it was a little annoying as a reader to read the same word over and over at the beginning of a sentence. There were many instances where I feel things could have been rewritten to be worded more clearly and concisely (and less repetitively).

As for punctuation, you used a lot of bold and italics that were frankly unnecessary. Sure, some instances I could see the italics being useful, but I have never seen bold in a published novel being used quite the way you used it. Sometimes, you didn’t close off your quotations when a character was done speaking (it’s a common issue but one that makes it confusing to the reader, so watch out for it in the future).

Otherwise, you did really well! hope you take my suggestions into consideration to help improve your writing.

w hugs! xionnevermore

PLEASE. It is spelt THOUGH.

Personal opinion: having some suspense and doubt on the reader's side as to the identity of Marinette's assaulter would be interesting. You've essentially skipped to the part where the villans is revealed to the reader, which is usually a fair Wayzz into the story. Perhaps you could have added a few other people to throw off the trail, or just not explicitly confirm Erik's identity. Reader suspense is just as important as character suspense.

what Sabine would be wearing would be a cheongsam aka qipao. Kimono is Japanese not Chinese.

I want to personally strangle the bastard that is called Erik

Aww Chloé!

I’ll have to say, the imagery that has caught my imagination the most is Cat licking away her tears. I really wish there was art for this or at least that I had even a little talent for it! It really tugs on my heartstrings in the best way!

I loved this story! Well, I am a bit late to read it but still, I haven't read a good marichat story in a long time, and this story was it!

Awe, he confessed he loves her!