Normaly, I'm bit nit-picky when it comes to stories written in the first-person, but to be honest I think using Homura's pov as a starting point sets the tone quite well. Will you continue with this format or do you plan to change perspectives further on?

Aside from that, this is shaping up to be an incredebly interesting endeavor, I look forward to seeing how it plays out from here.

Until then, farewell.

Homu Homu! This kinda turns me on heh.