I like it!

XD

I can't believe someone actually brought up a logical statement about slavery.

absolutely awesome story so far
...to the sequel! !

First, I will say that I was hesitant to read this because, for someone that only has seen the Star Wars movies, this would be something near identical to an original story (Maybe it is, maybe it does follow cannon events, I don’t know).

But now, having finished reading this I have to say that this was awesome, while most of the stories I’ve read in familiar of zero have been tied to the cannon events or have been really similar, reading something that I didn’t know where it was going was a nice change, specially loved the Sith side of things and having Louise deal with all of this.

One of the thing I loved the most (tough it scared me at first) was the fact that Loise was transported to who-knows-where and that she didn’t have magic, but soon the fact that she was Gandalf(that is the first time I see that) and had force made it all really enjoyable.
So too finish this I’ll say: Good work, now I’ll go to read the sequel :D

Also, if you like Familiar of zero stories that don’t follow all the cannon, I can recommend Emperor of Zero by Nietzchian, as with the Gandalf thing here, this was the fist time I saw a real life historical figure into that worl.

I feel like you skipped over a few chapters like the fight scene between Louise and Skotia

Hey there, I was just readin the reviews for your fic when I noticed the absolute cunt-muffin who keeps leaving the hateful spam in the reviews section. S/he seems like such a coward, too pussy to actually log in with their account to leave a proper review, and so hides behind a guest account to leave hateful trash. Probably cause they are jealous of your fic :P soo yeah, just wanted to drop a line saying I think your story is amazing and that mr. Guest account is a huge dick.

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Thank you for telling us via new chapter. (20 is a good number too)

Hey, I just wanted to Let you know, you story is amazing! I absoultly love it and I can't wait for you to start with the sequal! Keep up the great work.

Nice Agent reference, and oh I get it Khem Vall Luise's Familiar

Alright... I've what that other... shall we say 'asshole with internet' has been leaving you, and fisst, hugs for having to deal with that.

I do however have gripes with this story. First and foremost, Louise. This... is the mos inconsistent Louise I've ever seen, even if we're ignoring the blatant OOC ness of her. Perhaps it doesn't happen all that often, but always when it counts, the 'drama' parts of it just feel *forced!* Take the slave part. Really? REALLY!? So both those times Louise had to come up with plans on the fly to avoid killing them and she does it without a second though. But now suddenly, when she has all the time tin the world she chokes? For what!? There was so many ways that could have been avoided, but you ignored them, like people on SB said, all she had to do was spill her own blood, and why would she get mad at a bound slave exactly? And how the hell did she not known what the ritual would entail if she's *so studious*? And yet you seem to ignore that, as those two criticisms have gone unaddressed on SB...

The other is with Lord Juyn. So let me get this straight, the man who faked his death and made her kill, she doesn't get mad at, all the while badmouthing her flesh and blood family, which is OOC for her already she loved them, but hey, need demonization for that illusion right, saying that they were forcing her down a path! WHAT!? You even said on SV that if Louise found out she would be mad! But no, this passes over without incident! That seems to happen a lot, even though Louise is supposed to be a more independent one.

Louise really does just feel forced through the plot at times, important times.

A great story so far.
Can't wait for the next arc

lol! so louises cover story for why she has a broken arm is cuz she arm wrestled khem out of boredom? :) i beleive it XD nice meeting with thanaton. okay i am not impressesd with this Eagle guy. is this revolutionary wannabe a canon character or an oc? finally revelations uncovered! louise and by extension her mom and sisters are descendants of kallig! love the makeout session louise initiated with lyira :) nice touch with giving louise a fury class interceptor. the name she chose for the ship seems quite fitting. now a new chapter in louise life begins.

Inquisitor of the void...
Not a bad name but I would have thought inquisitor alone would be enough (the galaxy is a big place so there must be some other space crafts with the same name). So Louise now knows her element and given what the spirit has told her, possibly the origin of magic too. Perhaps Brimr was a Sith Lord?

Yay for Louise first sexual encounter!
She picked a safe route to avoid pregnancy.
For Dashede to call this 'unsith' is wierd, not enough passion? Too loving and romantic? I would have been tempted to tell him to F-off and not feel sorry for myself. Louise should stand up for her self more.