Reviews for Harry Potter and the Unexpected Lordship
Guest chapter 35 . 7/16
Need more chapters
Galagon17 chapter 35 . 7/2
I really like it, however I have my complaints, Hermione, to start with I find it extremely irritating with her complaints of knowledge and equality, also her manipulation with Harry makes me hate her, I understand and feel that the person copied almost verbatim from the canon in terms of personality .

On the other hand there are certain parts that I feel deserve or deserved more explanation, an example of it, the first task and the discussion and manipulation of Harry by Hermione.

Finally the story attracted me in the first place because of the Harry / Fleur relationship, however outside the moments after the ball Yule and the small mention in the third task, there is absolutely nothing about this relationship, as everything has developed I think that Fleur He is truly a better match for Harry than Hermione.

Anyway, if you continue this story, which really seems great to me, I would appreciate taking that into account, if you have any problem with continuing from here I think the first thing would be to deal with how Voldemort stayed "Alive" and if you use the horcrux then use some way to eliminate them, different skirmishes I don't think would be bad and finally a final battle with Voldemort's death. Then in an epilogue perhaps Harry with the girls and future children.
fvdv123 chapter 35 . 6/28
auw do not stop here plz if you cut some corners 10 chapters at most ;)
i bincht it from 1 to 35 in 1 go.
so find a remedy to find or destroy the horcruxses and kil snake face. let him mary the girls, some kids and the end. simple and i get some closure.
wishful thinking i guess .
Archleone chapter 35 . 6/22
It's a shame that you abandoned this story a couple of years ago. It was such a strange place to drop it too.

I did notice a certain amount of inconsistencies, such as Harry being in possession of the Gryffindor Sword, which you made a rather abrupt and big deal about whether or not Harry kept it for himself after finding it. The crazy goblin who tried to get him killed or banned from the bank went after Dumbledore for it, and there was never any follow up. Then, for some reason, when going to meet leader of the local goblins, he was able to casually summon the sword as if he had done so before.

My other personal issue with the story is that Fleur was mentioned as one of the relationships Harry would have in this story, but she kind of disappeared from the story. He saved her from being raped, she got super clingy and would hang out with him a lot, then she disappeared. There was no real character development or relationship building. She was just mentioned to have been staying close to him, then... nothing. She got maybe one line of dialogue after that, just before the maze in the Third Task.

I'm not even sure how you would justify her being with Harry unless you make up some kind of "super Veela bond debt" thing. And I'd much rather see her with Harry than Hermione who apparently thinks it's fine to browbeat him into doing whatever she personally thinks is right, even going as far as working with Dumbledore to manipulate him behind his back which is pretty unforgivable. Yet she was pretty much instantly forgiven in that same conversation.

I guess what I'm saying is that story needs some work because there's a decent amount of "questionable" things in the story, but at the same time it would be nice to see it continued and finished.
Archleone chapter 25 . 6/21
Hermione is such an irritating cunt.
ForgottenPrince chapter 35 . 6/15
Great story, shame it hasn't been updated in quite some time.

Best regards,
Prince.
Guest chapter 35 . 6/11
Truly enjoying your story. Can't wait to see what happens next.
Lerris chapter 11 . 5/31
So far this has been well mediocre. Having two "impossible" animagus forms seems a net minus. I just can't see that really helping your story. It might have been better to just stick with the phoenix One magical animal is somewhat more plausible.
Guest chapter 35 . 5/12
Finally got around to reading this. The general plot is quite good, but there are numerous errors within it. First things first: the description lists Fluer as an important character, while in the story she is a briefly interacted with side character. Secondly: there are numerous typos through out, but especially within the first 20 chapters. This is an easily fixable thing that could have been prevented with someone else going through and proof reading for you. If you don’t have someone you can trust to do so, this site has beta readers available for you to use. Third: never ever put authors notes within a chapter. If you pick up a book in a library, outside of textbooks, you will never see authors notes within the main body of text. I know some of these are nit picky things, but I bring these to your attention in hopes that you can improve as an author. Thanks for writing and having the courage to share.
waya715 chapter 29 . 4/29
an excellent chapter! kudos!
Guest chapter 35 . 3/11
please keep going
nintschibintschi chapter 35 . 3/13
what an amazing story thanks for writing it and please update soon
stay healthy and greetings from Vienna
nintschi
Guest chapter 35 . 3/2
It's all good and well this story and too bad it didn't continue, there are somethings missing though. Where is the damn romance? they hardly go out let alone kiss, even before h/hr broke up for it happend there was no kiss? count on hand the times there was a kiss or snog in this story.
Why where hermione and daphne not there with harry when he laid his parents to rest?
What does hermione expect from harry for staying the same has who she fell in love with, he needs to adept and change and grow up can't she see that.
Mionefan chapter 5 . 3/4
Still, speaking of money, I think you've still undervalued the Potter net worth, considering the Potter history goes back a thousand years. I'd probably have set the Potter family net worth at at least ten times what you've written.
Still, it's your story and money is a small part of it.
Anisabel chapter 35 . 2/13
Please more I like your story.
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