This will be good

Please release more of this man it looks so good

Please continue team Delta sky

im shy so dont expect a lot of reviews please continue I love this stories so please im begging you please continue

I think this is an interesting concept, and one that I haven't seen before, whether it already existed or not. The changes that you made to the age requirement I like and also think makes more sense than wandering on your own across the country at 10 years old. Personally I am very eager to see this story play out and will wait patiently until then.

Pls update rage of caboose

Hey, why not add Zinnia to the harem? Also, good story so far, I hope you update soon!

It's a good story I will enjoy seeing how it turns out

This seems like it's going to be intresting, but I have a question about the order of events, Coliseum comes five years before XD. You said things were altered but why put XD before Coliseum?

good story so far. how often will you be updating as looking forward to reading more about this new team?

Will you do battle Frontier? And please add Sabrina and Elesa to the harem

NSFW cover images are banned.

You should separate your author notes with a horizontal line; otherwise, they look like part of the story.

In prose, numbers less than 13 or so are written out with letters.

You're formatting dialogue incorrectly. Dialogue is written as ["Hello," she said] or ["Hello!" she said], never ["Hello." She said] or ["Hello", she said] or ["Hello" she said]. This is because dialogue and speech tags are considered to be part of the same sentence, so they have to flow together. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn't contain a speech verb. In that case, the second part iis/i considered a separate sentence, so it's written as ["Hello." She grinned], never ["Hello," she grinned]. Note that something isn't a speech verb just because it's a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like "laughed" or "giggled" is in the second category. Furthermore, if you're breaking up two complete sentences it's ["Hi," she said. "This is it."] not ["Hi," she said, "this is it."] or ["Hi," she said "this is it."] And if you're breaking up a sentence in the middle, it's ["Hi. This," she said, "is it."] The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don't use quotation marks (or single quotes) with thoughts. This is because quotation marks for thoughts make it look like your characters are talking out loud, which is confusing to the reader.

[The 2 girls gave each other a look, beginning that thing where women have silent conversations.]

Hate to burst your bubble, but women don't actually have telepathy and acting like they're magic fairy creatures is extremely misogynist.

ME A MINIONS! NO! I AM THE KING PLAZMA! AGGGGGGHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH...
Ok calming down, more please thank you.
KingPlazma
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