Regrettable de rejeter les forgerons que ferait ces villageois et ces aristocrates si il n y en avait pas pour réparer leurs voitures et leurs attelage

I enjoyed this story. You made me contemplate murkier moral issues and how they relate to attraction and love. I am happy that the ending was a happy one, and that Lizzy and Jane realized their dreams.

I do have a criticism, based on the tone of the story as a whole - I believe you fell short of your potential (and in keeping with the story as a whole) in not giving a wedding night to the reader. Your portrayals of the characters are very unique, and you worked hard to maintain them, done so beautifully in every other chapter. You Darcy, in particular, is a sensual creature from the start, and you don't shy away from painting that picture for the reader. It's a portrayal maintained consistently throughout the story line, nuances you work hard to not only create, but thoroughly maintain - And your Lizzy is firey, perfectly matched with your Darcy, their compatibility and attraction portrayed almost expertly throughout (you were really great at this). The lack of realization of their undeniable attraction, your failing to give the reader confirmation of the tone and excellent portrayals you build from the start for these two characters (what you made us believe were possible for Lizzy and Darcy when they were able to finally experience their passions together)...You've sold yourself short, and your readers, too. After reading over 100,000 words, you definitely ARE capable. You've set the stage, carefully assembled each log into place, and even poured angsty, tension fueled gasoline over the whole thing, and yet even though you've invited us to come closer into the setting of your tale, you fail to strike the final match or allow us to feel the heat of that fire we're expecting to feel because of your normally excellent portrayals and carry-over of tone and attraction from one chapter to the next. Chapter 26 feels anticlimactic, almost cheap. It pales in comparison to the other chapters you consistently and so competently draw out and deliver. It is as if 26 was no more than an afterthought.

I know you're posting on AHA now, and can easily add a chapter to this one. Please consider writing/adding a new chapter 26, and then making this last chapter 27. It would truly add to the experience of this story, allowing us to feel the heat from the fire you've been constructing from Chapter 1. That one addition would be in keeping with the entire tone and characterizations you've so carefully constructed, as well as fit with the build up of them finally getting a chance to become one. I hope you consider it, and enable it, for the reader's sake. This is one hell of an awesome story, but this end, this missing fire you build - will you consider lighting it for us?

A lovely story and so well written. Thank you.

Lydia the scandalous girl.

This story is interesting, it's so that George Darcy decided to kill himself rather than raise his children. Now his son will be raised by a Male whore to be a Male whore. Happy New Year!

You've put so much effort in all your P&P stories. I've read several and they are all great. And I'm sure you've done the research, so maybe it just slipped out of your mind... for Matlock's wife it is 'Lady Matlock' cause the title goes to her by marriage. If she's the daughter of a titled man, then it should be like his sisters... Lady Anne and Lady Catherine... Just fyi...

What a great scene between ODC. I am so proud of Lizzy right now. I hope all works out well for her but either way she has stayed true to herself. This is a Lizzy worthy of Austen's PnP! On to the next chapter.

Considering their dire situation, Lizzy seem to be even provoking her uncle, as though it was all a game.

Loved the story, but disappointed in the ending. It seems like you just rushed into a hasty, mashed up conclusion, leaving too many unanswered questions. Story seems incomplete.

Great story! I loved the concept and the idea, it's quite unique. Thanks so much for uploading!

I do not like the way elizabeth is acting

Thank you for writing.
I hated it but it was my own idioty that made me read it through... Curiosity killed the cat or something in that direction. I knew from the first paragraphs that I would not like it but I still kept on reading. Sigh.
I usually do like a badass Darcy, especially if it is humorously bent but I didn't like this shameless flirt. Harder to swallow was this Elizabeth, I do not like it when she even contemplates the thought of being his mistress ( yes, I am a ninny).
Not overly fond of the Bennet's in reduced circumstances either.
So you see, I should have left it at the first chapter but I am an idiot, so I read it all instead. Sigh...

This FF is very different than canon, especially given that the main characters have different personalities. I guess one could see this story as the one thing that was changed in Mr Darcy’s éducation that made him less haughty and more flirting and how that impacts the story. Of course, at the same time, you have changed Elisabeth and Jane’s circumstances which means that they cannot be as candid than in canon.
I will disagree with some reviews. I have enjoyed this story. I enjoy the different side to Darcywith his twisted values but values none the less.
Thank you

I completely agree with Guest from Feb 22.

okay i had to pause my reading cause for the first time ever, you made me dislike Jane. Lizzie thinks much of her and always put her in a good light. she's the most perfect sister anyone could have. whatever. but I dont like how she's painted as perfect and faultless here. as though she could do or think no wrong. and then the next, you'll have her thinking of screaming at Lydia and calling her Mrs. Dirt bec. she married a blacksmith. Fine she's frustrated she's penniless and have little to no connections but i almost feel more sympathetic for Lydia, whom i extremely dislike in most fics and even in the book. She's described as an angel and understanding of their situation but couldn't she have the least bit compassion for her neglected and irresponsible 15 yr old sister?

i think highly of this story tho. i think it's brilliant but Jane's character annoyed me.