oh my god. wow.

of all the cliffhangers i've seen (quite a lot, especially because i love em a lot), besides rick riordan himself, this...
holy shmow.
imagine ending the story there.
right. there.

Your stupid story made me cry for 20 minutes. 10/10 second story to make me cry

I heard of this through a DeviantArt post from the creator of Endertale, TC-96. I decided, "Hey, why not check out this link? It's a fanfiction... can't be THAT bad, right?" I was SO wrong.
Why?
I expected this to be trash. Or at least badly written, with at least 80 typos/spelling errors, and the writer wouldn't know any grammar. At least.
That was how it was like when I read those Pokémon and Harry Potter fanfictions. The "best ones" were pretty bad - I think my brother outright told me that MY fanfictions were better than those (and I'm probably a decade or two younger than the writers of those fanfics ._.).
This is, without a doubt, the BEST fanfiction I've ever seen - not just for Undertale, but fanfictions in general. You have such an extended vocabulary in this, using words I'd never think anyone would use for a situation, yet they fit perfectly. Additionally, great job staying true to the characters' natures thus far. Tori(el, ahem), Asgore, Mettaton, Napstablook, even Frisk seem exactly how they should. I'm going to read Chapter 3 now. :P

That was such a good ending. I’m so glad everyone got their happy ending and that everyone made sure frisk knew they were welcomed,loved, and apart of their big happy family. Thanks for writing this it was so good to read. Great job friend.

That’s so sweet that what frisk wished for :3 such a sweet ending to the chapter.

;-; good job on really tugging on my emotions with this chapter ;-; amazing job. This story is so freaking great and I’m sad I’m nearing the end.

Oh snap that ending of the chapter was hard to read. Good job on makin me feel emotions. Great writing!

Holy crap that chapter was amazing XD

That was a nice ending to this page

This is really good

I've been wondering something for a while: YouTuber iscoppie made an Undertale anniversary animation about Undyne and Alphys meeting for the first time. It had some pretty similar dialogue. Was this interpretation, by any chance, inspired by that one?

Alphys, you little grammar Nazi XD

Aw, poor little thing. :( Yeah, you bet you weren't thinking right, Bub. You'd better not have gone through with it if you didn't find out who she is. Also, HOW do do you expect to eat a monster in the first place? Don't they turn to dust when they die? Who wants to eat dust? Yuck!

I really want to read this, but I can't get myself to sit still wish I could have my computer read it to me

I pretty much set my computer on the table read the first sentence stand up walk around/play on my phone then try to sit back down and read groan get back up and then watch YouTube. then a week later try again then it repeats!
I'm pathetic.

:)

10/10

Hey. I'm crying now. Just wanted to let you know.

Wow, you sure like typing "Bob" a lot, don't you? XD I absolutely loved this chapter - who doesn't love beautiful reunions? Near the end, though, when you mentioned buying "plutonium" off a website, it just says ".com". Probably because Fanfiction doesn't allow any type of links. So maybe try putting the name of the website instead of it and .com?