Esdeath is such a romantic.

I LOVE this

This was awesome. I hope you do more stuff like this.

Please make some sort of sequel to this

Holy Crap, I got a fracking boner from this chapter title alone. The description was really great, but some were too clumped together to really enjoy.

I have to say, I have mixed feelings about this, but overall it is a good story.

The content was good, here and there even great. I really liked the way you wrote the smut, which was better than most of the other works I have ever read.
The content of the story was so good that it made me want to read until the end, even though there are some mistakes in the way it was written.

I do not want you to take it in the wrong way, but I have to be honest and say that if the story would not be a good one, I would have stopped reading it. On that note, I can say that you have a lot of potential and I would like to read more of your work, so I guess I will get to the others AGK fics you wrote.
On that regard, if I could offer some advice... I felt like in short paragraphs Akame's name (as an example) was mentioned too much. There were paragraphs that contained the name on each line, and while reading it out loud, the redundancy hardened the natural flow of the words. That would get easily fixed by getting to another point, which is the fact that you switch between the character's point of view maybe a bit too often? If you would offer a whole paragraph to just one character, you would not mention the name that often because the reader would know who you are referring to and you could say something like "her", name, younger/older girl (like you did) and so on...
Plus there were some moments when I felt like you started the sentence with one idea in mind, changed it midway and then kept both versions. This being just one of those situations: "Esdeath broke the kiss and opened they opened their eyes for the older woman to see the deep blush on Akame's face."

But these are small things that happen to a writer and which can be corrected by re-reading your work or have someone as a beta.

I hope you will not perceive all that I said as something negative, but quite the opposite. It is rare for me to comment on the stories that I read, but I really liked the idea of the story (and the story itself), and I felt that maybe leaving my thoughts here as a way of providing feedback will not do much harm, maybe even help in the slightest? But I have no idea how you will receive this comment, maybe that is why I felt like posting using my secondary pseud.

Keep on writing!

Wow...
That...was...extremely steamy!
Holy Shit!

The story was quite hot!

this story hottttt! i love it! good job

That pregnancy part doesn't make sense. But this was awesome smut. I really hope you do more, like maybe one with Seryu or Suzuka.

Love it!