She was pissed at him because he didn't notice her lengthening hair? Out of all the things to be angry over the fact that he didn't notice her long hair, when even she didn't notice is so petty, it's borderline manipulative.

First off, you have a way of describing inimate moments without relying an words or excessive narration. The opening scene, with Raven propped on her elbows and her uniform unzipped just enough to reveal her shoulders, feels very organic without being smutty. Well done!

The simile of passion being "blown away like autumn leaves" was very apt, and pleasant in a poetic way too, although perhaps taken a bit further than necessary with the "bitter aftertaste of unfilled desire" etc. It took the moment to a dramatic place, whereas I was just reading it and thinking, "Chill out, Gar and Rae. It was just your first time."

"I want this. Why are you denying it to me?" Haha, dialog that doesn't go over as well if the guy says it instead.

WHOA, really low blow for Raven to bring up Cyborg during precoital talk. If there's ever a time I don't want my girl saying, "Remember when I was alone with...", that's definitely at the top. I'm always an advocate for being in tune with your partner and being constantly responsive to his/her signals... but if she deliberately brings up another person for the sake of making Gar jealous, then she's asking for anything that happens as a consequence. Seems like she was more than okay with it, anyway. Maybe her demon heritage can provide some context-it would explain both her manipulative nature and why she wants it so rough.

To be clear, I love your writing. I'm giving specific criticism because that's what's helpful to experienced writers, and because it's only fair-after all, I'm taking tips myself from your writing.

My stories are often inspired by specific scenes or interactions that flash through my mind, and I think that was the case here. Certain parts came across really well, especially the lull that occurred after Gar and Raven settled into their predicament and started to calm down. The moment in which they were quiet and just breathing felt very intimate, and the sentence about Gar anticipating her next breaths was very endearing. On the other hand, the kiss really seemed to happen out of nowhere, and the tongue shenanigans felt very invasive since we hadn't really established that Raven was even okay with the kiss.

Overall a charming moment. Raven may have fleed for now, but she'll have to answer to Gar after their business with Red X is resolved!

The 4th one is actually really funnny, totally OOC and weird... but funny XD

LMAO

You are going to drown me with all the fluff you deliver in this chapter! Not that I'm complaining, though.

That is good. That is really good. Really cute and heart wrenching, and it definitely brought a tear to my eye. Hope to see more!

Pulls himself away from Divinity Original Sin 2 to check out your latest updates.

Raven, just be glad that the kids are calling you Auntie and not Granny. This was a cute little chapter. With the team helping Sarah entertain the kids. Of course Raven would have picked the story of Malchior to tell everyone. That is as interesting idea, with Raven using her empathy to gauge her audience's reaction and to help enhance her story telling.

Raven doesn't get off easy this time, though. An older kids happens to be within earshot at the end and asks Raven to continue the story, getting the kids all excited to hear more. I think it was cute that at the end of Raven's story, Beast Boy was there to give it an ending. The kiss reaction reminds me of Princess Bride and how the kids being told the story didn't like the kissing at first.

Probably not the best time and place to do any serious convincing.

D'aww. What a cool story. I always have a soft spot for stories on their children. I imagine Garfield as a great father, and Raven as a good mother.

Oh my gash! You did it again! I'm in love! This is so going in my favorite one-shots file! Brilliant job, Golem! You hit it out of the park once again!

Kissing ain't gonna cut it green bean! Raven wants more than that!

Another great chapter.

Well worth the wait! Hahaha very well done and a wonderful story she can tell for the rest of her days. With a happy ending.

oh God I need more! I've been binge reading this it's do amazing!

1920 are by far, my favorites of your one-shots. They are fantastic.

And the family begins.

I hope Raven can keep her temper in check when the kids are kids. :-)