a fucking horse on the citadel? that has to be some kind of joke right?

why are you still using nukes when you have antimatter? bigger yield and no radiation

why does no one seem to understand that if you dont rely on mass relay you can win any war quite easily.

attention citadel council you are assaulting our colony shanxi pull back all forces or we will nuke your home world.

ofc they will deny and you'll simply send a drone ship through stocked with nukes, then you'll give them the ultimatum pull back or every hour we will nuke another planet.

there is this story humanity rebirth they have their own stealth ship normandy who can travel anywhere undetected even right past a turian home world. instead of dropping mines left and right they jump in their fleet and slugg it out like it is some goddamned honor dual.

why would shepards team use translators to keelish they got from the quarians? it would make far more sense to translate it into turian

a political personyou ofc mean a political delegate.

this describes perfectly the lvl at which your story is written, very simplistic. so far as already mentioned your tech makes very little sense, colonizing so many systems with mass relays is again 'weird' now exploring space to find trading partners which you can trade eezo for metals with because you need those metals. in a space society common metals are more then abundent, asteroid belts are huge and can be mined at very low costs. so again this initiative makes very little sense.
ive read a comment on some of the war crimes you've described which are quite frankly appaling. why would anyone resort to such cruelty? burn a planet with nukes, fine it saves soldier who dont need to go down there. jamming a shotgun up a prisoners private parts is beyond fucked up for no reason. no sane military would condone such indulgence of emotion unless the themself revel in it in which case i hope the turians bomb them to hell.
your characters in this chapter have been given a background in a debrieving kind of way, this is boring and i personally care very little for it, finding it a waste of words.
you also say hyperspace is not an OP move against the reapers, this again shows your simplistic way of thinking because anyone who knows anything about war knows finding and catching your enemy is the hardest part. hyperspace a massive antimatter mind right next to a relay both go up and take the sun with them. let see any reaper survive that

so your writing is simplisticyour plot is forcedyour characters objectified.
im not saying your story is bad but it aint exactly good either. please those take these as flames cause it is mearly an observation of what ive seen so far

we have been content to explore space in our inmediate stellar vicinety.

is that why you have no less then 8 planets (systems?) with a mass relay? dont these connect over large distances?

i disagree with so very much of this time line of yours, the main problem is you are trying to be to specific with your science.
take your solar plant in the sahara, how do you get the energy from there to the rest of the world?
im not gonna nitpick at every detail but sufficive to say i disagree

you should of had it as a 2 child limit to keep the population stable with a 1 child limit by the time it was abloished the pop count woukd of shrunk by 1-3 billion.

While this is a good story and I always love the whole new technologies route in fanfiction of various sci-fi universes, there is so much spoiling done by the testimonials you have at the beginning of each chapter. At this point, I can reasonably infer almost everything that will be happening in the story and I pretty much already know how it ends. Still a great read though, and I’ll continue to read :)

The population numbers are too low, also the one child policy would make the global population be reduced in number with the passage of time, There is absolutely no reason for this,more people means more minds more minds means more inventions, a trillion people will do a lot more than a billion
in warhammer 40k the only thing keeping humanity alive are their numbers.

It was not so bad to read before ch. in hell you just want to create another shit fic with Mary Sue OC?You are some kind of middle school girl on training?Character creation is hard,if you cant make it rly good DONT DO doent look cool for others,only in your wet to find some guides in internet and make some real respected work

well interesting way to negotiate. anyway great chapter

I had to reread the last chapter to remember what was happening. I liked how garrus is losing his shit

Great Chapter! I’m so glad to see this story updated and especially since it was on my birthday

Nice chapter