When writing in paragraphs keep the speech with the person speaking. In several paragraphs you had the speech and the followed by a subject the person is speaking to. It felt like I needed to use context clues to figure out who was talking sometimes.

Err... It seems that you had fused The Queen’s Champion and Betrayed Son of the Sea together, I can’t say it’s bad because it’s actually good. Just have a few own ideas will you? Peace out.
Bsmaster0114 to Nightshade Guardian

are you dead or did you just forget about this

Ahem... A yin yang symbol is Chinese, not Japanese.

This fic is like a mixed result of Betrayed Son of The Sea by Hans50 and The Queen’s Champion by Anaklusmos14. Are you sure it’s your own made?
Bsmaster0114 to Nightshade Guardian

Why does this fanfic written alike The Betrayed Son of The Sea by Hans50?

Hi there.

So far, I must say I really love your story.

First of, it started kinda like Anaklusmos story but that is pretty much true for a number of stories here.
But I must say that I definitely enjoyed your take on it. One can really see your progression with writing, it is surely nice to see improvements along it.

I also like how you made him a God but at the same time that you managed not to make him too OP yet. I like the concept of growing into the powers and that he still has to really fight.

The Artemis branch I enjoy too. You manage to make her more serious, more book-like Artemis. If I say that most guardian fics manage to make her sound like a 16 year old highschool teen with her first crush, I am not wrong.

Anyway, I hope you return to this story, it deserves the ending.

All my best

PS: Subscribed and followed

This is EXACTLY like another story here 'Betrayed Son of the Sea'

epic

Color
Armor

please continue this story ita great

Best fanfiction i ever saw

You copied this story and switched the characters

Love your fan fiction writing! Please continue!

Really loved your story til this point. One of the best Guardian stories I've ever read. Pls continue 3