Reviews for While Your Lips Are Still Red
Akshata Rauthan1 chapter 3 . 4/11
Plz update
This story is after all one of the few that I find different.
'Cause most of them have ideas that are repeated.
GMGaby chapter 3 . 9/11/2019
Great story so far, but why is it tagged as humor/romance? While the first chapter had some comedy, overall this is an angst, and considering that in this universe Sirius spend his time in jail etc it has some elements of tragedy as well.
BratGirl1983 chapter 3 . 8/20/2019
I am really looking forward to the next chapters, please update
Guest chapter 2 . 8/14/2019
Orion is just like dad aww
Guest chapter 1 . 8/14/2019
Ignore the haters, this is a fun little heartfelt story Update plz
Abbey Riddle chapter 2 . 3/22/2018
Right, ignore my previous comment, I, like a jackass, did not see a 2nd chapter.
Abbey Riddle chapter 1 . 3/22/2018
...well if she didn't demand a trial for him and believed the worst of him immediately, she's a bad person and he shouldn't have blessed her with a child. How absurd.
Catnip56 chapter 2 . 7/29/2017
Please update! I love it!
elizabethrose1974 chapter 2 . 4/17/2017
I love this! will u continue?
Ahoy123 chapter 2 . 2/26/2017
Oh I liked it very much! May I also add that you are the funniest writer on this site and that I am slowly starting to fall in love with your stories :D
This plot line though, it will create a lot of agony wouldn't it? :( And wouldn't Hermione raise Harry with Orion if she was best friends with his parents instead of leaving him with the awful muggles?
Alexa SixT chapter 1 . 1/6/2017
I LOVE IT !
Karla chapter 2 . 12/4/2016
I love it. I must say that English is not my first language, but I could tell when a story has spirit. I would like to read Hermione's perspective (describing how she believe that her Sirius was guilty) , I think that would bring more substance to the story. I can no wait for another chapter. Please update the soon as you can. :D Greetings from Peru
MischievouslyManaged chapter 2 . 12/3/2016
I happen to actually really LOVE your portrayal of Hermione. I think that it is quite realistic of her as a single mum, with no real answers to her significant others situation.
Dont let the Haters get you down! :*
Guest chapter 2 . 11/18/2016
Please add to this. There are so mnay unanaswered questions!

- When does Sirius find out? (That year, I expect.)
- How large and emotional would their confrontation be?
- How would Orion react?
- Will they become family right away?
- Would things be awkward?
- Why didn't she reach out to Harry?
- What about Remus? Did they keep in contact at all?
- What about the Second Voldie War?
- Ravenclaw!Orion x Luna, do you think? XD
Malhearst chapter 1 . 10/31/2016
Ouch, what a bittersweet story. I thought at first it would just be about the relationship problems of Sirius and Hermione, which, in majority, it was, but the ending sort of twists it around to reveal a new side to the story.

I really like that he calls her Mia.

Hermione does seem a bit OOC for this story. I understand that there's something deliciously human about rounding her out to have these mood swings when she's drunk, but I don't think she needs to be drunk to have a temper, and I think, even though her feelings are amplified, that this is a little exaggerated from the Hermione we know. The one time I remember her losing her head was to set her birds on Ron, and even then, she didn't continue harassing him. With Sirius, it also seems like she keeps her mouth shut just from him looking at her, which doesn't remind me of Hermione either.

I loved the ending, and I thought it brought a new colour to something which could have easily stood alone, so well done on that :)

Mal
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