A few spelling errors and a general overuse of ellipses, but this is pretty interesting
Really hope you pick this back up

! Carry on reading! Or you will die, even if you only looked at the word warning! Once there was a little girl called Clarissa, she was ten-years-old and she lived in a mental hospital, because she killed her mom and her dad. She got so bad she went to kill all the staff in the hospital so the -government decided that best idea was to get rid of her so they set up a special room to kill her, as humane as possible but it went wrong the machine they were using went wrong. And she sat there in agony for hours until she died. Now every week on the day of her death she returns to the person that reads this letter, on a monday night at 12:00a.m. She creeps into your room and kills you slowly, by cutting you and watching you bleed to death. Now send this to ten other people on this one site, and she will haunt someone else who doesn't.

This isn't fake. apparently, if u copy and paste this to ten comments in the next ten minutes u will have the best day of ur life tomorrow. u will either get kissed or asked out, if u break this chain u will see a little dead girl in your room tonight. in 53 mins someone will say i love you or I'm sorry
Example 1: Jenny didn’t believe this and deleted it without even reading. the whole thing! A few days. later on the monday night, she was woken up by loud footsteps. and heavy breathing, there was. Clarissa standing there with a huge knife...

I love what you did to Umbridge in this one; muahahahaha

OH...SHIT. Crota is walking around with human Rasputin for a meat puppet. Well damn, if that isn't a monkey wrench in Draco's plans.

On a lighter note, I saw the Defense Against the Dark Arts trap a mile away, and I think you wrote Dumbledore very authentically for that bit

...HFS! I LOVE THIS

The way you've written Crota, I can't help but be terrified of how you'd have to write Oryx in response.

"I said… what do we do about Harry Potter/"
i think you should replace / with ?

"Gryffindor!"
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BOOOOOOOOO!
Hufflepuff for the win!

I giggled.

You could COMPLETELY remove this chapter and no one would give a crap. It's unnecessary as you haven't shown an INKLING in showing his "past" before now. And it was done so abruptly that I thought you uploaded a chapter of another story by accident. But now knowing it was intentional, I feel that you have no idea what a FLOW means in story context. You literally left a cliffhanger, then completely disregarded said cliffhanger and started a new ARC.

That's quite honestly the stupidest thing I've seen in quite some time. You write decently well, that it was unexpected. I'm not mad,... just a little disappointed in you.

Also, your "shock" of Draco telling the teachers that he was the one who kidnapped Harry made ABSOLUTELY NO SENSE. You literally had Dumbledore tell "Mainly because of the fact many are now aware that you are the one who kidnaped Harry as a baby. That and they know little to nothing about you". Therefore it was implied that they already KNEW.

love this story can't wait for more

nice fic

Harry's grandmother on his father's side was a black. Dorea Potter nee Black

please let this story still be in progress. i hate starting a good story and then it being abandoned