This story is good.

I vote for you to continue this story.

Great chapter! :D

Great story and chapter so far. :D But do you think that you could make it easier for people to read by putting some space between your lines.

This chapter is good so far

I cannot read anything or even IF i COULD this would require proper spacing

basic example:

1.
2.
3.
4.
5.
[this is a line this is a line this is a line this is a line this is a line]
[this is a line this is a line this is a line this is a line this is a line]
1.
2.
3.
4.
5.

the numbers represent the actual writing area number's 3 - 5 can also count as form of spacing
but again...within the 1 - 5 range is as far as one person can go before they HAVE to

press [enter] This...this is just a mess plain & simple (brutal honesty) but yeah

there it is...

good beginning