Not too bad even though this is the first chapter I read. Be very careful on how you punctuate because there are some parts that have words capitalized but don't need to be. What is the purpose for some of the quotes being in bold letters? I know using abbreviations for certain things makes typing easier, but some of the abbreviations should be typed out so that way other readers know what exactly each thing is. The reason behind that is so that way if you get other readers that like to read the latest chapter (like myself), they aren't like what the heck is FKA or TFL. Please do separate your author's note from the rest of the story...just some constructive criticism that I'm saying in calm not harsh and without attitude tone. I actually thought it was part of the story when I first went through. I do like the beginning, though maybe not all of the enemy's Pokemon need to be dark Charizard and dark whatever. Having dark in the name and then having a move that has dark in it just seems too (pardon the pun) dark and repetitive. I didn't see any when I was reading, but make sure that you aren't doing any run-on sentences. Other than that not bad. Looking forward to reading it as a whole.

DABB

I really like the story! keep it up!

Honestly, the intro-authors note was so cringe-y that I knew immediately that the following content would make my eyes bleed. It did.

Do you know how many times you used the word up in a paragraph? 8 times.

After that it was just a heap of uninteresting "he said, she said" drabble. Like seriously, try organizing your thoughts and then write them, dont just add whatever pops into your head or at least think about it. :/

This belongs in the Anime world. Find your story under "Manage Stories" and select it from the dropdown menu that says "World: Any" in the "Category" section.

You should separate your author notes with a horizontal line; otherwise, they look like part of the story.