This amused me.

Ok, that was freaking hilarious

Whew. You've just gotten me to read my first armourshipping fic.

Pikachu must have half given-up at that moment, huh.

Anyway, it's great as always - and writing humour actually suits your style really well! It's definitely ASH to watch fireworks with a girl, eating the homemade cookies she got him, discuss love languages with her, and somehow not view the whole shebang as romantic. Yeesh.

Serena's sanity (and perhaps that of all those girls who ever had a crush on Ash) is also definitely in pieces. Not sure how restful they're though.

Also: congratulations. You got a review from Farla! Yay! Rite of passage!

You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.

[Ash crunched on one of said cookies as he spoke]

Please don't use the "of said" construction. I don't know where people got the idea it's supposed to be used this commonly. "one of the" "one of those" etc would be appropriate, this is just a clunky nightmare of a sentence.

[Serena simply stared at him, flabbergasted, the only noise she made in response being the twitching, which had only gotten worse.]

The real question is, she already knows he's a dense idiot, so why did she think doing a bunch of subtle things was the way to confess her love instead of saying it out loud. At a certain point it's not just Ash who can't get a clue.

I checked all the fics with Ash tagged written so far in 2017: you officially hold the 'best fic' record for the first two days of this year.

Keep it up. We need more quality.

Yeah, I could see that happening with him.

whoa um very impressive job on this amourshipping fanfic, congrats and as a fellow amourshipper i have this to say to you and to all my fellow amourshippers around the globe who support amourshipping, amourshipper and proud, remember that dudes and dudettes and keep up the good serenaandashshipping work dude.

Ash is denser than lead. I nearly wet my britches from laughing so hard. Good job on this. The build-up was perfect.

God damn it you actually had me going there that Ash might have finally made a move! Ahh that facepalm :P nice one dude

*Superfacepalm

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