NOOOOOOOO! I wish there was more to read! :P

This is really good! Nobody behave too unnaturally, the dialogue is great, and your description allows me to see everything that's happening. I do think Luke submitting to the apprentice role was rushed, but at least it's for a reasonably believable reason.
I don't know if you'll see this comment, but if you do, know that I'd be extremely interested in reading more!

the second chapter is quite good at giving a young clueless luke a reason to want to be Vader's appreciate but I'd have to say some of the heavier moral ideas seem misplaced in context. It seems sometimes like their lukes personal thoughts and if so their just a tad to rightous for kid his age. not saying I don't mind the moral code and innocence but I'd make sure that it's either purly third person or Vader's observations on lukes natural disposition. but even with all that this story really is getting off to a good start. I appreciate the lack of immediate 'hey I'm your dad be loyal to me' that the rest of dad Vader stories fall into.

interesting

Luke is way too annoying. Children don't think like this and they certainly don't have a moral stronghold. You're just projecting through Luke and it hurts the story.

Good story so far, will Luke figure out or was told about Vader being his father

Looks good!

An interesting idea/vignette. It has the potential to become a longer story, but it's nice how it is too.

niiiiice. you also are one of the few who can write a child properly. he sounds like he would for his age which is a bad habit other fall into of making a five year old either sound like a two year old or a twenty years old. praise the Lord! please keep writing there's so few like this.

I look forward to seeing where your self proclaimed delusional mind takes this XP

Good start! Please continue!

Great start. I can't wait to see how and when Vader reveals his fatherhood.

Really interesting story so far! Can't wait to see where you take it! :)

This looks really interesting.

Interesting, I look forward to more!

What a cute story! I always enjoy these Vader-meets-one-of-his-kids fanfics! I'm feel sorry for little Luke, he's so tiny and sweet yet he's going through so much! First, Jabba the Hutt, now psycho-daddy Vader lol Well, nice work!