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welcome back. good to see this updated. kinda bummed out that longueville wasnt here to fix the coat with him. I still ship it... although with this new contender(?) will there be a scene where they both might duke it out for ragna if he ever visits again to fix his coat with longueville in tow? would be awesome if so

Im happy to see this story getting updated. It was a good read, and I look forward to see where you take this.

Ah. Its good to you updating this fic again. My many thx. I also like the changes made. Seems very fitting of ragna. Also if louise is this jelous of siesta, i wonder how she gonna react cone miss lougeville. Or the other chars. Me like. Looking forward to the next chap

I agree with Masterx01, please avoid the whole Guiche affair is totally unnecessary

fark... seeing longueville again has my shipping sense on overdrive... dam i really hope we can some..."upgraded" fluff action. mah boi ragna deserves some love after CF

also. why are you downplaying Ragna's cooking skills

why do so many stories post Central have Rsgna being homesick or crying? seriously. he left his world with no regrets. hell considering his life he definitely wouldn't be melancholic about with happy memories.

Well, this feels better than the first time i tried to read this fic a while back. It didnt leave too much a positive impression due the narrative was too simple and somewhat chopy and the characterization felt like needed some work.

Now, while the first chapter felt like that and i believe you should give some more work if only by virtue of being your first chapter, the first thing your readers will see, and some might get turned off by the quality of it. The second chapter felt much better even if still have some issues.

The most glaring one is that you keep alternating between present tense and past tense. Dont do that. Its annoying and sometimes confusing for the readers. So i suggest you choose one and stick to it for the rest of the fic.

There are also some missing words and typos here and there and if you care about being ' loyal' to the canon til BlazBlue elements derail it, i will say that in the novel Louse failed several times before summoning Saito and i think there was no explosion involved. Also, what the classes entailed that day i dont know because Louse put Saito to 'sleep' after he asked her to him to 'make him awake from that dream' due his disbelieve about his situation.

Thats all.

Keep the current quality and may be add more details to the narrative to smooth things a little more. Details about the background, the people, descriptions about how somerhing or someone looks, etc.

And also, avoid the cliche pitfalls like Guiche's duel if there isnt a reason for it. The kid isnt that bad but the fandom has twisted his characterization a lot over the years to get that duel to happen or for one or other reason when, given the character of the person summoned, such a thing shouldnt have happed as it was Saito who instigated the whole thing by rilling up Guiche. More often than not people put him trying to 'punish' Siesta for the two timing thing, something i doubt he would do.

There is also the thing with the Count Moth or something who, to be a anime character only, also gets varying degrees of characterization.

And, of course, you shouldnt hug the canon like it is the only thing between you and certain doom. That in the sense that if things doesnt make sense to something to happen like in canon due Ragna not being Saito, then do not make them happen like he were, specially because Ragna is way stronger than Saito even in a bad week, smarter and more experienced too.

I remember correctly that at the end of Central Fiction, Es kept taking care of the Door, so Es appears in this story or not

Well dam. I almost shat ma pants when i read announcement chap. I though that this might be abandoned. Thank goodness i was just paranoid. So you gonna ninja fix? although rereading again i can such different than what o remember. I usually like rereading fics i like. It does seem more natural and and flowing. Less gram mistakes too. I love this revamp. Although, just a passing though, you make a new fic for the revamped. Makes a good marker to see how far you've grown. Also so others could actually see the huge effort that was done.
Kudos good author. I'm truly glad that you have taken the time to revamp the fic. Im looking forward to re read this fic all over again. Also more fluff for ragna please. After that dam fiasco of an ending for CF, like dam finally after 4 games an official ship ia confirmed but they sunk it b4 it even left the harbour. Dam sadistic devs. I want ma boy ragna happy. He deserves it.

Grammar still needs a little bit of a clean-up.

Sigue! tengo que saber el final del arco!

A good chapter.
I think they should try to steal back their flagship and leave. That would be a honorable retreat instead of a total defeat.

Aye. The azure grimoire helps him to use ars magus since before he had no talent whatsoever. But he still needs to put in the effort to actually use and master it. And since he is practical and on a warpath b4, he usually only use the essential to his needs. I now look forward on how you gonna spice things up here.

So finally we getting to the final chap of the arc? About time you lazy author you. TO THE STAND WITH YE HEATHEN AND TAKE 50 LASHES!

But in all seriousness congrats man. We finally reaching the first milestone of the story. Thats quite the achivement since there are plenty who didnt make it halfway of their arc. Many thx for this chap n i look forward to the next.

P.s. WE NEED MORE SHIPPING BAIT YOU SADISTIC MONSTER YOU! MY HUNGER DEMANDS IT! AND MORE BADASSERY! Btw i wonder if ragna can dual wields now he got 2 swords? Deflinger for def while aramasa for attack? Or it could switch up depending on the situation. Just food for though