This was a very fun and enlightening story. I loved Chomper and his antics in this story and it took real effort to make Elsie seem like a good character. I found her annoying in the film abut she truly works here. Well done on that.

The characterizations were excellent throughout. Chomper's parents' personalities seemed quite natural and their dialogue was believable. However, the conversations about "El Zee" truly excelled with their hilarious dialogue and the characters' antics. Chomper's insistence on her existence and his parents' attempts to reason with him were priceless. I know it sounds strange but I seldom laugh when I read anything but here I chuckled throughout. Great job!

Elsie herself seemed like an interesting character, one that could have actually improved the film. Your descriptions about her past managed to build enough background for her to be interesting and her drive to avoid sadness is something I can easily relate to. Moreover, her character was very likable but not unnaturally so. The slow collapse of the island was a nice thing to add as it could at least partially explain the extremely realistic pathway to the island.

I especially enjoyed the lively dialogue, great descriptions and the look to Chomper's early childhood. This truly managed to deepen the lore behind the fifth film in an entertaining and imaginative way. This was an amazing story and it truly brightened up my day.

Well I must say, this was quite enjoyable to read and one of the best Chomper/Chomper's parents stories I've read.

I didn't think it was possible, but you manage to make Chomper even more cute and adorable than usual haha. I like the way he doesn't know sharptooth completely yet, that and he's still little more than toddler in human years. It makes him all the more charming to observe.

Chomper's parents are pretty much how I imagined them. Caring and kind, but also tremendously concerned about their son. The part of the story where they're concerned about Chomper's friendship with leaf eaters reminds me of that one part in the fifth movie where Chomper's father observes his son gathering green food and goes "sometimes I worry about that boy." XD

Anyway, your characterizations of his parents are spot on. His father almost reminds me of my own in a way. Strong, intelligent and a good father, but a bit clueless sometimes haha. Elsie was also quite touching and is a great addition to the story in her protection of Chomper and his family.

Land Before Time is one of those fandoms where they offer very little information outside the movies and it's not always consistent, so it allows a great deal of leeway when writing fanfiction. You've used that advantage wonderfully and as usual, your writing is quite impressive and the story flows very well. I look forward to seeing more from you.

Ahhh, Elsie really did deserve so much and you delivered it awesomely! I love her and I loved the way you kept her in character. Beautifully done, mate! Thank you for giving her some love after she'd been forgotten. I'm sad that she didn't fully make an appearance in "Journey to Big Water" but a cameo is more than enough. Good job!

This is a superb story that sheds light on a period of Chomper’s life that we have seldom seen even in fanfiction: his time as a youngling after leaving the care of the Gang of Five. We also get to see the beginnings of Elsie’s concern for some of the land-dwellers, which is a welcome addition to the fandom considering that she has… well… I think no stories dedicated to her until now.

In addition to the plot, which is easy to follow and relatable, I must commend you on your portrayal of Chomper’s parents. The loving sarcasm of his mother is tempered by the lovable lazy-biter that we see in Dun. Despite Dun’s hard exterior there is a sense of honor and concern for his son. Though they both have been hardened by their way of life and experiences, their parental nature shines through in this story.

I know that an Elsie fic has been on your mind as a possibility for a while. Well, let me just say that you have succeeded in doing the character justice. Despite this being a deux ex machina character in the film, this story makes me want to hear more of her exploits, and that is very telling of how good this story is written.

Very nicely done. :)