Hi,
I am unable to leave a review on Amazon as I don’t qualify yet. So I will leave it here and hopefully will be able to find it back once I will be allowed to review...
I really enjoyed your story. Quite original view on P&P and I like how you have actually change the characters to reflect the fact that there is a son to inherit. Mrs Bennett feels a lot more tolerable for example.
I think as well that you did well in describing the challenges brother can experience when it comes to their sisters.
Yes, they could have been more challenges or angst but for me the story was not about thisbut rather on how different things could be should Jane and Elisabeth have a brother.
Thank you!

LOL! They are so funny! I really love Bennet. :)

People like you are deplorable. I have waited for this story to be complete so I can read it, but all you did was use the site as testing grounds for your second-rate garbage. Not reading any of your filth you no-good trash basket.

Can’t find the book on amazon

Hey there! I am looking for this on Amazon and cannot find it. Even under your name, only your book Real shows up, not Mother Knows Best, which I know I have gotten before. Help?

that was fun

While I enjoyed reading this story the lack of anything close to Caroline makes it less satisfying. That she would turn away from 10,000 £ now Darcy and go with 2,000£ in the future Bennet isn't believable. Her deplorable comments and Elizabeth's rebounding words are what makes the story so enjoyabe!

" How treats the day you"? Its even difficult to say.

I'm of the opinion that even Lucifer would run from Caroline! But potentially pairing her with Bennet is intriguing.

I'm glad you omitted the " tolerable " comment because it just sets the stage for the usual Elizabeth having anger and misunderstanding Darcy situation. Something different is refreshing.

I neglected to send praise for this story when I first read it but having read it again just now I must pass along my thank you for a delightful and angst free story. I thoroughly enjoyed it.

Good story, well told. My only critique would be the use of "smiled widely" that you used a couple of times. Smiled slyly, smiled winsomly, smiled coyly, yes. Widely? They aren't frogs! Widely isn't really an adjective that works here, but I see often in JAFF, sadly.
I'm very glad you avoided the other overused and horrible:
"Looked up through her lashes" (Anatomically impossible)
"Spun on her heels" (Natural spin is on ball of foot -ask any dancer.)
"Gazed into her soul" (Gaze into eyes, yes. Soul? No. Not possible. Actually, any reference to soul in JAFF doesn't really work, IMHO.)
Nice job on your story!

The assembly and meetings work just fine! I hope Lizzy can bring Darcy out of his gloom and I appreciate this more sympathetic version of Caroline Bingley.

As to superpowers: Wickham must be the mind reader! Darcy is the human torch: he is always slinking off to lurk in corners so he doesn't combust. Elizabeth is such an outdoors woman son she should be able to fly or have super speed or something. Sounds like a fun idea for a story. Speaking of which, I love the betting games in this one!

This is a wonderfully entertaining story! I am glad to have read it all the way through. Excellent writing! Great way to end it!

Charming story. Darcy and Elizabeth are so enchanting. Thanks for sharing your story. Well written.