Reviews for Conversations with Corrin
L.F.P.man chapter 8 . 12/16/2019
Not a review, but a comment. This series has warmed my heart, but the idea of Flora being sold for that really breaks my heart. Though I still love reading tha
Temporal King chapter 10 . 8/16/2018
The first Birthright story to finally have a start and finish, thank you so very much for all the time and effort, I'm so glad I was able to be a part of this story and give as many ideas as I can.

Unfortunately, this chapter isn't perfect. It's very rushed and the emotions are heavily lacking. For example, Corrin has his moment with Elise, he has his time and after seeing her again I kinda feel that he isn't seeing someone he once called sister, but s beautiful woman who's life was cut short. You could've had Corrin snuggled up to Elise as they were falling asleep, Corrin softly crying saying to hell with the prophecy, she'll always be his wife to him even if she isn't here, her and Beruka are his family no matter what.

You could've even had Elise tell him that both of them and Mikoto will be waiting for them when their time comes, that it isn't truly good bye and from now until the end of time she considers herself Corrin's wife...

"We'll be together again one day my love, live your life to the fullest for me, me and Beruka will be waiting for you and the others in the next life, so mourn not for me for I will always be with you and death will reunite us all when the time comes."

Corrin could've fell asleep with Elise hugging him and playing with his hair, Corrin finally at peace with Elise...no, his wife's death, he knew it isn't truly good bye. Even the love making didn't feel romantic or very passionate, it felt similiar in the lines of how Hinoka and Corrin went at it. Although the touch of Corrin naming his daughter after Elise was extremely good, although I think Kana should've been the one to get Elise's name.

My favorite part is when Mikoto was talking to her daughter in-laws, it was really really good and you remembered to a knowledge in laws. It could've been fleshed out a little bit though, you missed Orochi, you could've had Mikoto comment how Orochi isn't her best friend anymore, she's her daughter and that's how she would like her to view herself. You also forgot that they are all now Princess's, so not only could Mikoto ask them to watch over Corrin but to watch over her kingdom, she entrusts its future to them and the children.

Everything else just felt rushed, Garon's death, Azura's death, Ryoma and Oboro came out of no where, the epilogue was rushed badly, I liked that you gave Flora Shigure and yes I agree that it makes sense given that Flora and Azura hold similiar hair color's but you could've gave Azura as Shigure's middle name in memory of Azura's sacrfice. You could've shown Kagero, Flora and Orochi adjusting to Royal life, Felicia being treated like family cause she is family now, Corrin giving Kana Azura's pendant etc etc.

I don't know why you rushed it but honestly it's just nice having a ending to a Birthright story and Birthright has been harshly neglected. Yes, he chapter and ending is rushed but I'd rather have a rushed ending than a great story that never gets finished and to top it all off its a harem that actually worked, that actually had time and thought out behind it and didn't take on more than ehat it could handle, that isn't easy to pull of you did it.

I would highly advise one day revising this chapter and giving it a heavy make over when the time comes, fleshed things out, give more emotion, a better epilogue etc etc, as is the story is great wi a rushed ending but I feel it would perfect of you went back and redid the ending and put more detail behind it.

But that's just my humble opinion. I hope other writers will one day pick up Birthright, it's so heavily neglected. So, I guess that's it, I've given you other ideas to work with in the messages I sent you, only time will tell if we might see them. Until that time comes, I thank you for this amazing story, harem, underused girls, Birthright and an ending, what more can anyone possibly want?

I don't know what's next but I hope the next Fire Emblem story you post is revealed soon. Keep up the good work my friend and thank you for all that you've done :)
Temporal King chapter 8 . 3/11/2018
Finally all caught up :)

So Mikoto and Beruka made a final appearance, while that was a very nice touch I feel that Corrin's reaction to Beruka felt tame, I feel he should've cried more and been vocal about it, you seem to forget that Corrin isn't experienced about the world, he still is naive and curious about the world, he can still be battle hardened a bit but seeing Beruka again should've pushed him over the edge a bit, showing off that he still retains his innocent nature. I also feel that Corrin should've told her that no matter what destiny says she is still a part of his family, she still is her beloved and will never see her as any less, even in death he loves her and will never let her go, until then they wait until death one day claims Corrin, that way Corrin would truly be at peace with Beruka's passing.

One thing I absolutely loved about this chapter though was that Camilla isn't loved by Corrin anymore, not even as a brother. Not only did she ruin any chance she had at having a relationship with him she can't even go back to being step siblings, she lost Corrin for good, sure maybe one day they can call each other friends, but any romantic love or familiarity love is destroyed and gone forever. Killing Elise ruined any chance Camilla had in love, but Beruka's death killed any love he had for her period, to Corrin she isn't his sister anymore and never will be again, unlike Hinoka who is already on the path of redemption and is working to fix her mistakes and can still have a brother-sister relationship. This is basically a great set up for the rightful ass chewing she has coming.

Corrin vs Leo was short and simple yet effective, Iago's death was satisfying and deserved and Leo finally coming to his sense's was a added bonus, the punishment was more than satisfying and probably the best Iago death I've ever seen yet.

So let's talk about the final girl, I feel that Nyx or Peri would've been a stronger choice, Nyx because she hasn't had a family in decades and Peri because she isn't all there and having someone as loving and tolerant as Corrin would've done wonders for her, Flora is decent but I feel like you could do better in terms of character development, hence Nyx and Peri. That being said though, there is one thing you need to address in the next chapter, Royal status and in-laws. These girls, minus Caldorie, are gonna have a new role soon, Princess's of Hoshido, there is a lot of development there, Kagero and Ryoma acknowledging their new in-law status, Orochi coming to terms that she went from being Mikoto's best friend to her daughter-in-law, Flora marrying into Hoshidan royalty and Felicia and Corrin becoming in laws and finally Kagero, Orochi and Flora being Hoshidan royalty, their children will be Prince's/Princess's and heirs to the throne, that's a lot to take in and I feel that there is a lot that can be done with this concept.

One more thing, even though Elise and Beruka are gone, I don't think you have us a reason on why they had to die, especially Elise who died seconds after confessing her love to Corrin. Why did you kill her that quickly without giving her Corrin's answer?

That's all for now, loved the chapters and your Awakening story, both knocked it right out of the park. Keep up the amazing work.
Temporal King chapter 7 . 3/7/2018
And I'm back with a new review.

I did like the funeral and I'm impressed Corrin managed to keep it together the at he did but he also didn't shy away from allowing his emotion to show, truly he was heartbroken about losing Beruka. If she was given just a little more time she would've adapted to her new life and truly put assassination behind her, something tells me she would've made a phenomenal mother.

Camilla...you blame Corrin for all the pain you put him through yet you ignore what pain you put Corrin through? This is one of the chapters big flaws, Corrin reacting to Camilla'a outbursts, it was Corrin who was forced to watch his real parents die, it was him they lied to and trained to fight the people he was supposed to help guide and lead, they were the ones to call him a traitor when he literally eatched his mother die in his arms. What son should be forced to hold onto their mother as she dies, no child should ever experience that. If they just listened then nine of this would've happened, they chose to believe in Garon who is very obviously insane. They chose to believe Iago who clearly is a snake in the grass waiting to strike and they all know that. They chose to believe in Han's who is a known criminal and murderer.

Elise died because they used her to get to Corrin and she wasn't even given a proper chance to pursue love, Camilla help take that from her permanently, Camilla murdered Beruka for her own selfish gain and for intense purpos's killd one of Corrin's family memebrs, Beruka would've been true family to the Hoshidan's if it wasn't for her.

So I feel that Corri. Should've blown up at her rather than just gently talk to her, I would've done that, she deserves it, she needs a reality check of what their blind loyalty and fear cost them, they destroyed their own family, they could've prevented Nohr from destroying themselves but they pushed for it and wouldn't stand up when it could've made a difference, Elise's death was entirely THEIR FAULT.

I do like the concept of Corrin letting Camilla go and shows that even though he should be rightfully angry with her, Leo and Xander he still follows the Hoshidan and his mother's ideal, but the problem is that Corrin's behavior isn't realistic and reeks to heavily of the game's poor writing, he needed to yell, scream and rip Camilla apart verbally, any person would do this after being put through that pain and its deserved.

I also liked the backstory for Sumeragi and Mikoto, even the king knew Corrin was destined to help lead his kingdom, it's a nice touch as well as Mikoto's adapting to royalty.

I think that's about it, poor Hinoka won't be with Corrin, we know damn well that Camilla won't, so I wonder who the Nohrian girl is, I just hope you don't have Corrin forget Elise and Beruka, especially Elise, the poor girl didn't even get a proper chance and I feel that should resonate with Corrin, unlike Camilla who obsesses over him, Elise genuinely loved him.

Keep up the good work and remember, anything I say I strictly personal opinion, no more and no less :)
Temporal King chapter 6 . 2/14/2018
I'm back and ready to review!

Poor Beruka, that's the 2nd underused girl you have the axe to, literally. Honestly though, while Elise is my Awakening OTP and Beruka is another girl I would wrap my arms around and never let go, I'm honestly fine with character deaths, it's painful but that's war. Earlier Fire Emblem games didn't have Casual mode, so I guess this is playing on classic, it surprising that quite a few people go into Fire Emblem stories expecting death as that's the nature of Fire Emblem, every move count's, sometimes for the better, other times for the worse. Regardless, RIP Beruka, you are loved and never forgotten.

I will admit though that Corrin's emotional state should've been more tragic, Beruka made leaps and bounds and opened up more than she ever thought possible, but for her to truly be happy she needed months, not weeks. Sure, she was brought up as an assassin, but what happens when she marries, finally has a family or God forbid she had a little one herself. The problem though is that Corrin was destroyed when Elise died, well it's implied at least, but he is treating Beruka's death unrealistically well. He made love to her, she was close to having family and was opening up slowly but surely, all the progress, the hopes of a better future was stolen by Camilla. He should've been more angry at Camilla and heartbroken that his future bride was stolen from him, if it was my lover who was killed I would be destroyed, this isn't how Corrin should've reacted at all.

Also, Camilla. Corrin, you desire peace with the woman who has tried to murder, was involved with Elise's death and took Beruka from you...are you sane? This is t how one should reacting, ok I get it, if he gives Camilla what she wants then she is harmless and that is a valid strategy, she won't lift a finger of Corrin claims her and even gives her a child. But this should be a hard pill to swallow. This should make him feel sick to his stomach, marrying his lover's killer? Marrying the woman who took Elise from him? That's worse, Elise wasn't even given a full chance and Camilla made sure she wouldn't, yes Han's threw the axe but Camilla was a part of the plan.

Again this isn't the way someone who has lost love one's should react, as Prince of Hoshido he needs to make sacrifices for the greater good of his people, that's why he is the leader of this army and not Ryoma and I even feel Ryoma should acknowledge Cprrin and say how proud he is of him for this sacrfice. But on the other hand Corrin's emotions should be shot, he should feel rightful and justified rage towards Camilla. If that was me impulse to want her near me, I could never trust her again and faking it can only go so far. His is made even worse when Camilla, who is selfish, would probably not feel any regret for killing Elise and Beruka, as long as she has Corrin's love she'll sacrfice anyone and Beruka's death proves it.

Realistically Camilla should see the enormous pain she has put Corrin in, acknowledge that she betrayed Beruka and Elise, she dosent deserve Corrin's love and never will.

Hinoka is the better of the 2 elder Princess's. While it's good that Hinoka is finally being put in her place I feel that she can be redeemed and could possibly have a chance, it isn't destroyed just heavily damaged. Hinoka is redeemable, Camilla is not and I just can't see Corrin taking Camilla as a lover, to him this should make him feel like he is spitting on Elise and Beruka's grave's, they died because of Camilla and yet he's giving her what she wants in the end? That means they both did die in vain in a sense, their deaths ment nothing to Camilla as long as she got what she wanted and Corrin tries to treat his harem as equals and has succeeded in doing so. Giving Camilla what's she wants should be the last resort and it isn't a descision he makes lightly.

Of course those are just my thoughts and opinions, make of them as you will.

Next chapter!
Ukataka Awadachi chapter 5 . 12/4/2017
Keep up the good work and make sure you don't go overboard and strain your mind alright? XD
Guest chapter 2 . 11/23/2017
Hinoka is sooooooooo late to the record.
Temporal King chapter 4 . 9/12/2017
Finally got this done, god damn procrastination.

Damn guy, with how you've portrayed Hinoka you could've fooled people. I can understand where your coming from though, love has to bloom form Corrin and Hinoka must earn the love and respect of the girls he is with in order to be a part of his life romantically.

So Caldorie is next, lmao. Subaki and Sakura's son-in-law is Corrin, that's pretty funny and surreal to say the least, well, at the least nobody can ever deny Corrin's place as Hoshido's Prince period, not that Ryoma, Hinoka, Takumi and Sakura would allow that behavior in the first place, but being adopted and now marrying Princess Sakura's daughter? It's practically cemented, I do though want to see Sakura give her blessing on one little condition, Corrin calls her mother and Subaki father, again it's surreal but for some reason Corrin just feels happy having someone to call parents again, even if it's from the most unlikeliest of people lmao.

I do like that Orochi and Kagero love each other, for the harem to work the girls need to love each other and treat each other as wife, not mistress's, you are getting that down well, it's that type of development that is needed to make a harem work, not rushing along to have the male lead bang everyone he see's and for the woman to just up and vanish without a trace.

One problem though, that's Kagero's condition number 3. I understand she wants to marry Corrin first, I understand she wants to carry his first child, but child labor is painful to say the least, who's to say Kagero wants to go through that again? Not to mention Orochi and Caldorie might want kids as well, would she deny her future wives that privilege? I think that 3rd condition needs to be re-evaluated just a bit as Kagero might be taking on more than she could handle.

Keep up the good work and update soo :)
Guest chapter 2 . 8/29/2017
Maybe could we get a CorrinXCamilla based off of the little blurb? I would love it. The rest of the story is great as well!
Guest chapter 4 . 8/12/2017
This fic is great! It felt almost criminally under-reviewed, so I wrote one. :)
EVmeatdrummer98 chapter 3 . 7/31/2017
Man I love the way you write both Kagero and Orochi, you've got them so accurately! It seems Corrin and Kagero have gotten "intimate", hehe very well done in that regard! I really liked Corrin' s background with Camilla, I can see why Corrin was worried in perusing another relationship; that was very well written. The only critique I can think of is the mentioning of Naga, since in the world of fates they worship the first dragons. Besides that I think you're doing great, I'm looking forward for another chapter!
Shadolance chapter 3 . 7/5/2017
Really enjoying this story as a whole so far. I love the rivalry between Orochi and Kagero, both are the two characters I was mentally choosing between on my first Birthright playthrough. I chose Beruka on Conquest and Azura on Revelations, so this works out well for me too :) Keep up the good work, I love your style of storytelling. The only place of criticism I can find is a lack of punctuation in some areas that makes reading confusing, particularly when characters have inner thoughts or are addressing each other. The best example of this is the first time Corrin calls Orochi by her nickname, which is not very obvious and I had to reread it about 10 times before I understood what was going on.

Those are minor details though and are infrequent enough not to bother me for real. I love this story and hope it gets lots more chapters! Personally, given the way you write and focus on inner thoughts, but still portray people as human with human desires and human faults, I would LOVE to hear your take on Beruka in particular, given her background.

But ah, perhaps that is for another time. Keep up the great work, looking forward to more!
KingPlotBunny chapter 2 . 6/1/2017
huh even though Corrin is a prince of Nohr/Hoshido his true title should be Harem King
MGDex chapter 2 . 5/18/2017
Good chapter. I liked the inclusion of Orochi, and Corrin's past and I hope to see more interactions with Camilla. Without more to say, I'll wait for the next chapter
Guest chapter 2 . 5/15/2017
Ha, first Kagero and Orochi now possibly Hinoka and Camilla? Damn guy, you have outdone yourself greatly.
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