Something I missed in my last review- I like your use of music, very well done.

Well, things are certainly heating up:)

One thing though- but maybe done on purpose, but the tone in chapter 3 is different from the rest. But, I have chalked it up to the area Scott is in and even perhaps his P.O.V- probably not as cookie cutter as Brdigette's or Gwens (even though Gwen is a Goth she isn't all doom and gloom)

The setting- both the restaurant (which I believe there is a story to it and a hint to something else) and the area of town Scott was in are both interesting settings. Having him related to the brothers who are almost allergic to everything and inches close to being bubble boys- is an interesting concept- considering their different personalities-you also have me curious as to their father. Also, are they step siblings?

At the moment hoping the masked man isn't random- he was after something- I'd bet, either revenge or the book. My guess is the book.

Oh and ending on that book- I suppose, that would answer my question soon about what happens if someone else gets hold of it.

I am looking forward to Scot's story to clash/ interact with Gwen and Bridgette's (in my head they are both pretty close intertwined). It is something I like seeing the dots connecting.

Well, see you next update. Following now:)

GwenD

Ok,

I like the interactions so far and seeing how the TD characters fit, as family members, or how they meet/ know each-other. What I also like, is that you are not expecting us to know the characters-whilst I like that they act as they should, you are showing us them too and we can see that- so if we didn't know the characters- because admittedly I know very little of some- we can learn about them.

On the topic of characters' I like seeing the ones that we see very little of.

I do like this more confident Cody- because I think he needs it, but overall it is still Cody- so I am happy with that.

Also, the theatre set-up in an old opera house- sounds cool. A nice set-up for Gwen's work, whilst it doesn't sound like the best place to work- it does sound like a cool place to admire and explore- or even a good set-up for a haunting.

Plot/ story wise- good set-up so for. At the moment it is character interactions and set-up, there are only a few hints about what's coming and I like that.

Overall, I like this start.

GwenD

Nice chapter, it had action, and a little scary in it. I guess Gwen got what she wanted, the theater burned down too bad she'll probably have nightmares for weeks. Can't wait for next chapter.

Daaaang, things are starting to get weird and I like it.

Lovely chapter Mr. Aanonymous, I really liked this one. I would say that Gwen's had quite a day, I don't expect her even beginning to dream it would end the way it did.

I enjoyed the much more suspenseful tone of this chapter. Excited to see where it goes next.

So Scott wakes up to find himself in someone else's home?...That's interesting. He must have had one hell of a night if you can remember that much- what a guy! lol

Judging from the black cat, I kinda get the feeling that the blonde girl is Dawn, but that's just a hunch, she is an animal lover, so I could see that being the case.

Owen and a hotdog stand! That is rich, and it would seem that Scott doped him into giving him free food, that's so wrong, but definitely something he'd do.

I loved the pirate-themed restaurant, that was a pretty nifty idea and ran by Dwayne and Junior? That's different, but I could see it working. I just never saw that coming, but I like it. I find it amusing that Sugar was the waitress working there, I think it suits her. She seemed less chatty in this one and more into her work/job. (What I mean is that in the show, Sugar was always either putting Ella down or babbling on about something back home where she lived.) She seems more reserved, but I think it works for her.

The game on the wall the twins were looking at sounds unique too, I'm not familiar with it, but it seems like a neat idea for the restaurant.

And so we finally meet the serial killer, I'm surprised he didn't right out try to shoot Scott or worse. He seems like the type 'to shoot now and ask questions later' type. However, I do like his words of wisdom he was handing down to Scott, it almost seemed fatherly in a criminal kind of way you know. lol

Overall, great chapter, I certainly enjoyed it, and I finished it a lot faster than I thought I would. I guess time flies when you're enjoying a good story. ;)

Keep up the good writing- looking forward to the next one!

Nice finish with Courtney and Duncan. If only they knew who saw them having their secret little moment. Great chapter, Mr. Aanonymous, it was a doozy, but it was fantastic! Loved it. ;)

Very well written. I'm loving this thus far. All characters appear to be in character, and I'm left yearning to read the next chapter, especially after Leonard discovering his mysterious book. I love the rich in-depth descriptions and details of the places/surroundings and what not that's going on about them. Wonderful chapter, my friend, keep up the good work. ;)

Hey buddy! Here is the review of the next part of your story!

I must confess, I’m in the same position as Scott right now. What happened? Lol. I suppose that is the point, so nice job there. By the way, who’s the girl he was with?

Hahahaha! Great reveal of the chick having a boathouse!

Also, nice job having the first case of the supernatural being dismissed as Scott wondering what he had to drink last night. The robbed figure is Leonard, right?

I don’t remember if I commented on this before but I like details like how this city was established by oyster farming, a mundane but every real way of establishing a town. It makes the place feel real, which will be especially important when all of that crazy supernatural stuff hits the fan. It actually reminds of some of the towns in Lovecraft’s story, or the real life cod towns described in the book “Cod: A Biography of a Fish that Changed the World.” Despite how crazy I know it sounds, I would really recommend this book! It’s an interesting and hilarious read.

Good scene between Scott and Owen. And it is an interesting development having Mickey and Jay being Scott’s brothers.

Nice job with the pirate themed restaurant. I always feel odd eating at places like that. Good stuff with Dwayne Jr. and his father.

Interesting development between Scott and the inmate. I’m going to hazard a guess and say that this is the serial killer from the horror episode of Total Drama Island. Right?

Anyway, this was a good chapter. Nice job! :)

Another good chapter. I'm looking forward to where this is going next. Especially with the prisoner escaping at the end.

Okay... this one was a bit out of left field. This chapter is basically about twins. Even if the main character isn't one himself.

First we get Scott of all people waking up drunk off his ass after a one night stand with one of the blond twins. God, i hope its amy. I can see the two together.

After that we visit leonard again... well i think its leonard. There's only so many guys who wear green robes in public. I really wish the fish ate him. I hate that guy.

And the only people i hate worse are the adversity twins. God their so annoying. The best gift you can give me is they die horribly from diabetic or allergenic shock. please oh please.

But hey, guess who's back after all these years? The serial killer! well i think its him. How many other cannon characters are as huge as chef but only have one hand...please don't tell me he's an OC.

As always, keep up the good work and i can't wait for the next chapter.

Well... that was odd, i like that you put the Twins as brothers for Scott, and I'm going to guess that the girls in the boat is Amy. I'm seeing that you are first introducing these characters and their lives are going to interconect in more than one way.

Good chapter.