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I fucks with this

i'm done that Anime angry woman scares the shit out of M.C regardless of how fucking ridiculous the power difference is because Anime bullshit straight up pisses me off, you're altering of Temari and Naruto's relationship by having him call her sis was one thing but this "OH GOD SHE'S GOING TO KILL ME DESPITE ME BEING A MILLION TIMES STRONGER THAN HER" bullshit is just...no just no

Love the story so far but I wish there weren't such long periods of time between your updates. Any how I'm going to make a guess and say that ezra's surprise for naruto is hinata's mother hitomi and sasuke's mother mikoto kushina's best friends. By now I would think erza would have been with kits. Anyway keep it up I see this being epic length by the time you are done. Peace out :)

1) Glad you are liking it and sorry for the wait, as for adding Anko, I won't be doing that, I have my reasons and you may not like what I do because of them. Honestly, I don't dislike anything about Anko's character, but she simply hasn't had enough time for her to become a character I like. So for me, she is just a background character.

I'm surprised heavily considering shes Kurenais best friend, similar background, and in this story specifically is linked with Hinata. With Hinata getting help from her I really expected her to put in a good word or try to convince him to acquire Anko.

2) Glad you are reading this story and like their reactions, as for adding in Fu, it is like I told Persona of the PeopleFuu won't be with Naruto as, for me, personality would cause her and Naruto to act like sibling

I've noticed more often than not that writers feel this way with Fu rather than someone who has similar experiences with a similar fun loving personality and can better understand eachother being a reason they quite easily fall for eachother.

To me it's a shame but also not my story.

3) Ryuzetsu is out, she literally had to die for her Kekkei Genkai to work and Naruto just wouldn't survive the Blood Prison mission without her sacrifice.

It also doesnt have to play out like it did though right? I cant recall did it already take place or not yet? I dont think hes had sage training yet so it shouldnt of happened yet.

The mission doesnt have to take place at all like it did. Hes far more powerful and nowhere near being in a position to end up in that situation again. Perhaps he can handle it even before it can ever be summoned or him and the kyuubi and whoever else by that point may actually have the power to handle it if it is summoned.

Ryuu is amazing and a waste to have die off like that with her Chiyo of Suna like ability.

Seriously, screw that nonsensical movie. I have a hard time believing Tsunade of canon would pull that bullshit on Naruto or that fucking ninja should be able to make a mistake like not being able to inform him in time of the plan.

4) I thought Hiashi was among those abusing and making Hinata miserable. This in depth worry of her rebellious gaze has me severely confused of that's the case.

Only thing I got out of all that was that it may of actually been Hinata's mom and Mikoto and Mito was in fact not among the 2 extra choices.

5) Um.. with all that about wanting to brand her for being missing. Why the hell was no one considering another kidnapping from the village that was successful?

6) That almost sounded like she was going to decide on her own to train women Naruto may or may not intend to train and do so in ways of her choosing to make them specific ways without Narutos input at all.

Which would be going against Naruto and fucked up for the women who supposedly werent meant to be trained.

A side note I'm curious about how they're sealed. With food, water and bodily functions and all.

1) I saw Shion mentioned at the top. IF you wanted you could have her mother Miroku still alive in her failed or failing attempt to seal the demon.

Putting herself in stasis to survive with a seal. Maybe even linking herself to a seal to continue binding an evil demon so her body survives in a sealed out of time state while her mind continues to hold the demons seal.

Or her body is preserved but dead in the seal and her mind kept alive to attempt to keep the demon bound. If Erza has a way to revive the body and push her mental chakra construct back into the body that works too.

Not unlike Minato and Kushinas construct in Narutos seal.

2) Early on I was hoping Anko would be his friend as it never made sense to me in canon she had nothing to do with him prior or really after their encounter at the exams.

Theres only signs so far of her knowing Hinata. I hope shes not portrayed as the Snake Whore shes often insulted as and while proud of her looks and willing to use her looks like Kurenai absolutely has no interest in allowing the random assholes in the village the provelage of actually bedding her. Especially for bragging rights.

3) He had even gone so far as to teach her how to fight, or to the best that he could given that she was beyond the age to have any hope in gaining access to her chakra.

I hope this is through conventional methods. Always hated the stories that make it so you're screwed if you dont start as a kid. Especially if it's to the degree of not even being able to use magic or whatever the power at all by that point.

Hopefully now he has more options to help with something like that.

4) Gotta say this is probably my favorite chapter so far.

1) . As it continued to do so until the light was no more and all that remained was that of a woman with nine crimson foxtails and a pair of fox ears

I thought she had slightly pointed ears and no fox ears?

2) I can only assume the rage inducing info is that the leaf, through Danzo caused the destruction of Uzushiogakure. Though how Kankuro could find evidence after a couple decades after the fact at the site is hard to imagine.

Danzo likely being the one to guarentee or even start the desire to rebel in the Uchiha. Killing off the last chance at stopping his machinations by riffing Shusui before he can use his eye to manipulate Fugaku into stopping the movement.

Innocent civilians and ninja whi werent involved in the plans for the attack and their children, Izumi and her mother Hazuki, his mother Mikoto. Danzo needs to suffer.

1) I know the opening is for laughs. My brain wants to nag at me though that a wall Tsunade cant break would cause Jaraiya to turn to pulp if he hit with enough force to breach.

2) As not only was her master the one she loved, he was also one that showed great care for things that he deemed as his.

um.. great? Kicked, drug by hair in front if him. Lays back and is serviced and then leaves her to break someone she cares for, for reasons shes unaware of.

No affection whatsoever has been shown. No hug, kiss, handholding. Shes never before or after gotten affection aside from his anger during the chuunin exams.

Maybe protecting her from bullies once as a child if that's a thing.

3) I'm confused as to why no one has questioned if the kyuubi is manipulating him. No one confirmed the seal even once just taking it at face value. For all they know he could be seeing a seal that isnt there from a genjutsu at minimum.

Also her manipulating him doesnt go against the seal if it isnt with intent to harm. Like twisting his personality or having him consumed by his yami side.

Everyone going along with it without question is weird.

4) Naruto growled as memories of the kindness that Hinata's mother had shown him before her passing and the kindness that Hinata, herself, had secretly shown him, flashed through his mind.

More so makes me wonder if those extra 2 were Mito and Mikoto or Mito and Hinatas mom. I cant help think that Erza would make sure Mito was one of the 2.

5) Something that fanfiction writers of Naruto tend to not consider. Characters from Boruto can still be used in Naruto. Especially so if they dont intend to continue their story into the Boruto series storyline.

For example Chocho being a random Akimichi rather than being Chojis daughter. Sarada being a surviving Uchiha from the massacre or a daughter of a or a group of Uchiha who split off and went into hiding at the end of the last war to get away from it all. Only one not really usable is Himawari without removing her whisker marks and making her a normal Hyuuga.

Theres plenty of characters in the Naruto series that can be used already though I guess.

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1) She also convinced me to take other women as slaves to help free them situations that they didn't want."

This isnt really convincing if you're aware of the slave seals functions put on Hinata yet Erza kicking her, pulling her up br her hair and tossing her at him to be a toy rather than a person.

Loyalty already not an issue but again rather than a person Erza wants her to be a sleeve. He also said nothing about one of the only people nice to him being kicked and treated like that.

Yes Hinata acted the way she did after but still.

Add on he doesnt have an issue with yugao I'm aware of. That he will likely use the same seals on her. Yet all talk towards them was about breaking and training them. Saving how?

2) Misspellings here and there aren't a big deal. Like spelling Termary once in this chapter. But I think it should be pointed out that the Nara clan was spelled Naria all throughout the chapter.

3) With her speech I really cant help wonder if Erza intends to eventually pursue Yoshino when back in konoha. Maybe all the mothers including Choji's, for damn sure if shes trying to make a harem for him it would be weird if she didnt target animalistic beauties like Tsune and Hana.

I wonder what he will do to help with their life spans. I remember reading the link giving Naruto agelessness. I assume there will be an attempt towards demonifying them and binding them to his life force at some point.

Oh yeah, now I remember another option for those revivals couldve been Tayuya though shes far more unlikely than Hinata's mom. Not even sure naruto saw her for more than a moment just like Kin. Beauty or not. Enough of that tangent...

4) What happened to the deal made with Kami to keep the akatsuki off Gaara and Yugito? A deal that still has me stumped.

5) I was about to hit enter but it just occurred to me that with the biju being demons instead of spirit like beings made of chakra and there being a demon world. Well what and who is there?

What types of demons or even monsters. Is this a set up ro also do crossover characters. With Kyuubi looking like Erza, Kami having 2 forms, one from a series I dont know and the other Rias Gremory then it is entirely possible others will pop up.

Whether sticking to the demon/devil theme like Zest or not.

6) Added to that thought if the story is extended due to the addition of the demon world and what that can bring there could be other lands, beings, heroes and such with the lands outside the elemental nations.

Like the stone of Gelal has pointed out more lands and tech outside the borders.

1) After all, she had planned her escape very carefully for the last twelve years. So even if Kushina's and Mito's memories of their clan had assured her that Naruto's would be the envy of countless men, the Kyuubi still wanted to play it safe. Which, she was very pleased that she had.

So what I understood from this in chapter 1 is he was meant to be well endowed and she enhanced it further which succeeded.

Yet this chapter only has him at 8 inches which is just 2 over the average.

What envy? Especially if that's WITH her enhancing it.

If that's not enough the mentioning of 8 inches is while saying it had a rapid growth spurt with him becoming a king which means it was even smaller before.

Again. I ask. What. Envy?

2) So basically Erza doesnt love him at all. Shes obsessed with the thought if being the plaything of Yami Naruto who's hidden within him
The form he needed to overcome to use her powers originally is the one she lusts to turn her into a cocksleeve. Shes actually trying to get rid of him rather than loving him is what it seems.

3) I'm wondering who these 2 women are. I could think if 3 she would have an interest in. Mito Uzumaki, Mikoto Uchiha, and finally Hinata's mother who is often referred to as Hitomi Hyuuga. I assume the first two though.

4) I'm stumped the akatsukis plans have been ruined yet Erza kicked them back into gear while endangering the lives of the jinchuruuki and biju once again. Fu is in the crosshairs again as well which very likely means she isnt being considered by the author.

5) Hes also forgotten the family in wave as people who've been nice to him. As hes someone who wins over people often when on missions. I guess hes not going after Tsunami. Which frankly with this Yami Naruto thing I say good for her for being ignored by him. I'm not a fan.

Theres domination play and all that which is fine but his literal consideration for them never being more than concubines and sexslaves while enjoying the thought. That he finds it makes sense and enjoys showing her off like a trophy for all to lust for and thinks it makes sense to curb others desires. Treating them like crap more and more with less and less care showing up is bugging me.

I'd rather a Naruto that can be dominating for his loved one and enjoy it than Yami jackass naruto enslaving and ruining lives for his enjoyment enjoying groveling and submission with love seemingly no consideration. Overly quickly becoming one of those slumlord tyrant rape kings in certain hentai that enslave and ruin lives only without the whole sharing them with others and orcs or tentacle monsters part.

1) mother "supposedly" dead exactly nine months before I was born, that you had "attacked" also happened exactly nine months before I was born, that female jinchuuriki's seal weakens when giving birth, that I know my dad wouldn't be one to just

None of this would happen 9 months "before" hes born as he wouldnt have been born.

2) I get her convincing him to be dominant with her because shes a masochist or wants to be I guess. However his personality shift and so quickly and easily doing stuff like whipping her butt and choking her with a leash. Walking her like a dog are all abrupt as all hell feeling really out of place.

What's with that nonsense of showing others she belongs to him by giving them wet dreams and humiliating her? Showing off her erotic body in an erotic way and memorizing her moans as a way to show them shes his? Rather ot would entice them to let more and consider plotting to take her more than ever. Its fricken dumb.

3) Finally what's with the nonsense of her losing the bulk of her powers and her status as a queen? What's the point? He supposedly had more tails and at least potentially more power by what was said. Why the hell depower her when it does nothing beneficial and why would she lose her power in the first place?

Just because he becomes a demon king doesnt mean she cant still be a queen. While overtime he could grow in power to become a demon emperor. In which case he could and would have multiple kings and or queens serving him. It adds nothing and diesnt really make sense.

4) Finally I dont get what the hell hes doing with the others. He admits the people chosen were good to him or at least decent. Yet he strips them of their lives to turn into his sex slaves rather than punish someone else? The exception being Kurenai since fir some reason shes made out to be a bitch in this story.

For Hinata and Yugao though why would he ruin their lives. I could see him getting Ino since shes sorta like Sakura and Sakura isnt a clan heir. No other Anbu or Jonin though.

Also strange Kiri would go as far as to betray and toss away their kage of all things. Someone they would more likely never give up even for the daimyo who did nothing for them in the bloodline war.

Dont get why Kiri delivered Yugito either or why he would want to screw over her life, same for Mei who idk how he even knows of her. With all the people he could hate why target these people?

Hell I'd get it of he targeted Tsunade if he wanted a kage going by this story.

I'm friggen confused by a lot going on here.

1) I wish it didnt end up with him hating Tsunade. I vastly prefer that she intended to tell him after finding out he didn't know but he left for training and only just now came back. Not wishing to inform him by letter.

I like Tsunade so that's kinda sad to me it went down like that.

2) That tail stuff is interesting. Kinda off no one could sense him having some dozen tails worth of youkai. The seal has the kyuubi chakra so its basically in another space entirely and has to be forced through the seal to be used and sensed.

Since his is supposed to be his own it should be blatant to all unless he learned how to suppress it from others which he hadnt learned to do.

Also not a fan that even after someone gains control another still can if they know her name rather than her just being bound to him and hed have ti die first ti sever the link so she could be capable of being bound to another.

3) What I really dont get though is the stuff about her falling in love with his child self and wanting to be his sub. To go from she saw his parents as her own children to wanting to be their childs sub because she fell for him as a little boy barely in his double digits is confusing.

you should have yugito and yugao be trained to act like cats