This was interesting, and yet disturbing. I wonder what Polli thought when the Grey Lady gave Polli to that Bandit dude (I can't remember his name). Great Job!

A very interesting insight into the mind of a broken witch. When I read the trilogy, I must say I was fancinated by the parts that were set in the Twisted Kingdom (is that right? A friend of mine borrowed those books about six months ago so I can't check).

In any event, this is a very good interpretation on that theme.

Bye the by, 'if' you were to try and add appropriate grammar, I'm fairly certain that it would only make reading this piece more confusing. There would be some many commas, and collans, and semi-collans, and dashes, and slashes and parantheticals, that I don't think it would really be helpful You chose well in formatting this as you did.

Very good! I didn't have any trouble with the grammar (okay, aside from a slight boggle at the idea of a Dark Jewels-themed "Ulysses" monologue.) This was well-written, and disturbing in a good way :-) - I always enjoy explorations of minor characters.

Keep up the good work!

Wow! That is really powerful writing. Excellent expansion on Bishop's writing. Looking forward to your next works!

While I won't whine at all about the grammar, could I suggest a format change? I think it would be easier to read/comprehend if you presented it as free verse so our brains can catch a breath at the end of lines. As I read I found my self tumbling through the prose, missing words left and right because there was never a break to let anything sink in. I needed a few more pauses!