terrible story...

Alright, I'm dropping this. I can't stand the MC going around telling girls "I won't cheat on you, I'll only have one woman for life." then right after proceed to say the same thing to another girl, frit with someone else, then make out with a different one.

I mean, I'll won't be bothered about that if his goal is to create a harem, but all this time he's been thinking about how 'great' of a guy he is and that he won't give in to his lust only for his actions to be the complete opposite. I kind of get it if it's just MJ, Cindy, and Gwen since there is a spider involved but then he proceeds to add other girls to the group too.

Maybe he should take his own advice too and act his age instead of being a self-center prick that thinks the world revolves around himself. It's one thing to say you're a good guy, but it's another to show it through your action and this MC only showed that he's a self-center A$$ so far.

I'm a big fan of Spiderman and Peter Parker. I don't usually leave hate review but I feel like this MC just went and shi*t on who Spiderman is.

Continua

I support the whole don't be with mj stuff how does bothering himself with someone relationship make sense and being a busybody, this si is trash just saying I know am not the only one that thinks so

uhoh, i hope elektra didn't just make too big a mistake

Cool chapter and if you want to do a reboot that fine it's your story as long it's better than the original or it wouldn't be a reboot eh.

welcome back, can't wait for more.

Hello I was wondering how often this story gets updated because it quickly became one of the more interesting story I've read so far

Hi,
I was just reading your story A New Adventure and wanted to tell you some things about it,
but because i like your story, but what i wanted so say was negative.

I'm not a writer so i can't tell you how to fix it but your pacing sucks the scenes and perspectives change very quickly which makes it very confusing to read.
For example, in one line Harry is saying something to Peter and the next line MJ says something to Gwen in a whole other conversation without any visible scene change so i have to go back a couple lines and reread it because it doesn't make sense.
And that happens several times.
I think having an empty line between scenes or even better a sentence that connects yet differentiates them would probably be a massive increase to the quality of your story(ies).

So yeah, thats it i like your writing, i think you have great ideas, its just the pacing that trips me up while reading.

I thought the story was interesting but then you just kinda insulted peter's intelligence in the one part that gwen said something and hedidn't know what she was talking about, your character needs to be better developed and please don't be that kinda of person who goes around ripping off other peoples powers because that is not what spider-mans about, i read fan fictions that were like that and they just got annoying.

The whole omniscient narrator thing is pretty fucking annoying to read, to me at least, but I won't keep reading because of the girls got bitten, it reeks of harem, plus the MC it waaaaaaay too preachy.

Spoiler Alert: Second chapter, and four girls in lust with MC already. The protagonist is clumsy, dramatic and an injustice to the genius of Peter Parker! DroppedNot my cup of tea.

I'm trying to give some of these SI fics a chance. Some, like the goblin are pretty good, but ones that start of strong all seem to fall in to the same trap that they have to make every other girl in the story fall in love with. Mot SI fics suck a developing relationships. You should read A third Path to the future. it's a Harry potter/marvel fic. That story shows that you can make a strong badass male character and have him form relationships without having every female he sees throw themselves at him. It also has great character and relationship development. This is just my opinion, i'm sure you have readers who do enjoy what you're doing.

I catch your drift with your story perhaps you might like to reconsider the plot and setting you gonna go along with because most times it's all over the place if you set that right and the factor in some realism it becomes a great story.
btw should he have parker "genius" level intellect combined with the s.i's creativity he should be able to make mostly accurate choices and build advanced tech.
it's a good story you have the potential to make it greater, I enjoyed most of it regardless

Gonna stop following, getting too religious.