TSUME HAHAHAHAHA ALPHAAAAAAAAAA MALLLLLLLLLLEEEEEEEE HAHAHAHA

HAHAHAHA THIS IS SO CORNY HAHAHAHAHA BUT I LOVE IT EVEN TSUNADE CANT RESIST...I FEEL SORRY FOR JIRAIYA HAHAHAHA

Nice

Will you continue this story

did someone else write your summary? or were you just stroking it while writing? because the grammar and writing style doesn't match at all. very poor grammar and sentence structure. please get a beta; there's a lot of potential here and I hate to see it wasted.

The ridiculous amount of bashing to some characters is pretty cringey. I get that you dislike those characters, but is it really necessary to bash them in such a pathetic manner? Sasuke and Kiba aren't my favorites either, but holy shit did you have to bash them in such a stupid way? Hurdur 2 inch dicks, small chest, super annoying assholes, etc. At least make it a little more believable.

Would love to see this continue its a good story

I really want to see what happens next. Looking forward to the next chapter. Keep up the great work!

Would like to see a naruto x Harry Potter lemon like naruto master of Kunoichi

I think it's less about not being "most women" and more the fact there is a bunch of powerful kunoichi at home at some time or another making an attack on the kids suicide and guaranteeing the kids will at least be taken care of. Although the emotional and psychological damage of missing their parents for extended periods of time isn't something she thought about, given her and Naruto's rather single-minded thought process on their careers. The child, especially infant's instincts are fully aware that those other people taking care of them are not their parents. Like an infant crying a lot when held by a nurse but silencing and falling asleep the moment a parent holds it.

but those poor marshmallows want to become Smores, how dare you for not using those flames for smores.
JK (this one author said something about flames for smores)

Bro!Salute to ur imagination...I mean i ejaculate a min ago and after resuming reading...i can't stoo it anymore! THIS IS BETTEE THSN WATCHING 100 VIDEOS OF PORN IN A GO!

No offense but the stressed actions are a bit cringe inducing. I lost count of how many times I had to skip paragraphs because of the whole PANTING, GULPING, stuff. I like the fic but tone down the actions. They're fucking, not shooting porn. Nobody needs to shout loud enough for the whole neighborhood to hear her. I like the story a lot though

cant wait for chapter 23!

Update bitch!