Ah, wish there were more of this. While I found this enjoyable, the usage of punctuation—or lack thereof—is downright atrocious.

Its very good

will this ever update or has it been abandoned

I've read this again and again and only now realized the God of War reference.

Now I want to see Cinder fighting in the Vytal Festival just so Jaune can embarrassed her (and Salem). "Wooh Cinder, make Daddy and Mommy proud!"

When u update

You know. I like the implication that Remnant is in the shit state it's in because humans were stupid. Attacking the Grimm, then betraying the peace, after they had lost the war.

I look forward to the wizards reaction to jaune's return.

I like that that reference from how to train your dragon

wtf is this story dead? if so please say so. it's been a year since the last update.

You know what would have been a better story? instead of re-writing the entirety of Jaune's character you should've just wrote the story as it were taking place in the main universe. You could have made the Jaune the reincarnation of the Grimm King and have Salem go from discovering him to attempting to capture him to return him to his dark and evil original form. Toss some love triangles in there between any of Ruby, Pyrrha, or Cinder and you've got plenty of conflict to make the story interesting. Especially since they'd be struggling to confess to Jaune as well as keep him as the good lovable goofball they've always known him to be. While Jaune comes to terms with his own potential for evil.

You could also do this by not having Jaune be the Grimm King at all at first, but Salem seeing the pure good in him wants to capture and corrupt him simply for him being the purest of souls. To prove that no mater what Darkness always wins. His friends then trying to save him and prove her wrong. Basically you could have the threat of Jaune going full Anakin Skywalker on them looming over their heads.

Those would be interesting stories that people would wanna read. Because the key to any great story is conflict. And (while cute I guess) theres not much here to make the story truly engaging.

Oh shit I am hyped for the next update

This is a wonderful story. I love the take you have on it. I hope you write more for it soon

Just found this fic. I must say i love the opening chapter. I am really curious to find out why and how he was on that coffin.

That definitely was a good plot twist, only hinted at when Jaune asked Ruby "you recognize me, don't you?". Damn great work, needz more updates.

A RWBY story with Grimm King Jayne with inspiration from Noblesse, where he has Raizel as part of his name and this story is listed as Humor? This is something I've always needed since Noblesse stopped making too many jokes. Please please please please continue this, don't abandon your stories, they're all great!