Reviews for Rise of the Dark Red Dragon of Protection
Jj chapter 5 . 10/10/2019
So where is raiser and vali?
ACExMAVIS chapter 5 . 3/13/2018
short, the fuck make more
ACExMAVIS chapter 4 . 3/13/2018
nice one
ACExMAVIS chapter 3 . 3/13/2018
nice what the clan rank
ACExMAVIS chapter 2 . 3/13/2018
damm AWESOME
ACExMAVIS chapter 1 . 3/13/2018
nice
Amazing Lord Shamastus chapter 4 . 7/13/2017
Damn man, I can't help but get a good laugh when I read this! Despite how much it hurts me to laugh at the moment (for reasons you already know of), good chapter! It was funny and boy, did I read a lot of information at the end there... Sorry for the late review, but hey, I'M STILL HERE! As for your new story, I am not too sure on a name yet, I will continue to ponder ideas around for the next few days though.
Thanks for the shout out, man, it means a lot to me knowing that someone likes me on this site (in some way.)
RedBurningDragon chapter 4 . 7/8/2017
So seems like Issei got some animal buddies
Hope you have Issei wake up to take a pic of Koneko sleeping for his wallpaper
Phantomsoul2015 chapter 3 . 7/2/2017
So bald you have gasped an actual social life granted it's anymous and online but still social
Amazing Lord Shamastus chapter 3 . 7/2/2017
Hahaha! Dang man, stop making me laugh like a megalomaniacal psychopath! This chapter was lit, the COD part had me laugh to the point of tears as I thought about the kid playing minecraft telling his mother (or whoever) to, quote, "Get the F*** out of my room!" I love how you add these odd, but hilarious, shenanigans in such a casul way. The deliverance was gold, and I am looking forward to more! Kin da reminded me of To Love-Ru with how this chapter was written (In a comedy way.) Anyway, keep it up!
-Shamastus
RedBurningDragon chapter 3 . 7/1/2017
So Gasper is chilling with the gang online lol
Also COD really
so guessing some of the survivors are in with the other factions and keep the others updated or something
I see shenanigans when they go to school happening like To Lov Ru style stuff
Septorex chapter 2 . 6/20/2017
Alright, I like to pride myself as a bit of a critic, so if I sound a bit harsh in this, I'm just trying to help improve your writing. Now, first things first, the story itself. Honestly, it's a great idea and I haven't seen many others do something like this. Maybe 2 or 3 other people at most. So there really isn't much to say on that. Next up is the pacing. This is the part of seems your most lacking in. I'm noticing a problem I see with a lot of new writers, and I'm going to try to nip it in the bud. Try to add more spacing, slow down the actual story progression, and just in general add more exposition. So far from what I'm seeing, this looks more like a rough practice draft than a fully fledged story, but that's alright, your just starting out. Try to take a bit more time to add some things in between the interactions with the main characters, even if it may seem to drag on a little bit. Me for example, I prefer to read stories with around 5-10k words per chapter, but I can settle for around 2k. That's a good number for you to keep in mind. And finally, the time progression. I get this was mostly a chapter that was focussed on his new life, and how he changed after the facility, but still, that's a bit to many time skips. Try to tone it down in the future. I'm not saying get rid of them entirely, just don't throw them out like a bouncer throws out a violent drunk. Overall, this story could be quite good, it just needs a bit of polishing. Best of luck to you.
Xerozzuro chapter 2 . 6/21/2017
The pairing brought me here, so, Yo! o/
Although the story seems like it'd be an interesting one, I think you're focusing on the pairing way too much...
Now, for example, in this chapter (2nd) you finally had Koneko and Issei meet. That's fine and all, but they actually 'fell in love' way too quickly...
Now, I personally don't have an issue with that, I just think it happened way too quickly and you can't really... 'Feel it'...

Aside from that, I'll be keeping my eye on this. It might turn out to be rather interesting.
So, I guess that's about it!
Have fun writing!
TheUnknownUser2 chapter 2 . 6/20/2017
great story I find it really interesting so far also it's rare to see a purely Issei x Koneko fanfic so I'm really enjoying this so far and I hope you keep this to a single pairing.
Amazing Lord Shamastus chapter 2 . 6/20/2017
Thanks for the shout out again, and I really like how this story is coming along! It is unique and very intriguing, like I have said in our PM's. I have never read (or heard) of anything like it and the idea intrigues me! I will stick around till the end with you, and I hope to see more! I also really, REALLY enjoyed the Issei and Koneko bit. Thank you for writing this too, it is good to see a good Issei and Koneko Fanfic!
Anyways, see you in the next one!
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