its really good, keep up the hard work! -teckbears

I dearly wish you see where you are going with this. Patience is ever a virtue I strive for and can not truly grasp.

Good so far keep it up

I like it. Looking forward to contact

I like it, although one suggestion... Make it more clear who's speaking? This can be done by doing it like Yang: "Hey Ruby!" Weiss: "Be quiet Yang" or "Hey you two!" Said Ruby, things like that. But all things aside, I quite like the story, keep up the good work!

actually... this is a pritty good idea. i like it suprisingly well. i mean ive read a lotof crap ideas and storyson this cite and this story is well above the other ones. it is not even on that list, this story is definatly one of the better ones ive read. keep up the great work! you definatly left me wanting more!