Heya guest thank you for thank you for the criticism. If it really feels like this chapter is flowing and it’s too out of character then I will delete it and re evaluate and re post. What I wanted to do here is start kind off a cat and mouse chase. Really Naruto and itachi trying to one up each other in everything. Also I needed the house scene as it will become important to the story line later on. I always appreciate criticism, so I will try and re write this chapter then :)

Both Sasuke and Itachi are so out of character in this last chapter. I was really enjoying this fic till this chapter. This fic doesn’t make sense anymore. And why would Sasuke who will be such a puplic figure in the future work as a host that people bid over? It doesn’t make sense.

Thank you so much guest, yes i did try to place alot of fantasty theme ideas into this one, I hope everyone got them and if they didnt it was mostly subtle hints to cinderalla and alice in wonder land.
I am so glad you are liking it, ahhh ! makes me super happy. In terms of how they will connect in real life, I guess you will just have to wait and see MWAHAHAHHA

I really liked the fairy tale theme of this chapter. All the subtle little references were very nice, like Naruto having to leave at midnight, the golden staircase, the chapter title, "Pumpkin or Prince?" and so on. It was a lovely, yet bittersweet chapter with Naruto forced to leave and Sasuke unable to ask him to stay.

I'm really curious how they will connect in real life now that Naruto has decided to leave the bar behind. It's the right decision for many reasons. Naruto wouldn't want to bankrupt himself chasing a fantasy, for one. For another, if he kept returning to the bar, their whole relationship would be rooted in fantasy. It would never have the chance to grow into something real.

Can't wait for the next chapter. :D

Heyyyyyyyyyyyy guest. Absolutely what you are thinking is excatly what i am going for.
There second date will be interesting thats for sure.

Ahh im so excited to keep writing this story, because there are so much drama to come and I live and breath angst mwahahah.

THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR THE COMMENT 3

Sakura was obviously right about what she told Naruto. Naruto can't possibly expect Sasuke's words to be genuine. Sasuke is basically a professional host, albeit a much higher class one. His job is to be charming and polite and sell as much expensive liquor as possible. Ofc we know things will eventually change. They will get to know each other and Sasuke's feelings will develop into honest ones, but right now, Naruto should be cautious. It's to Sasuke's benefit to charm Naruto into coming back!

But I think it is also the same for Sasuke! Right now, Naruto's feelings for Sasuke are "lust" at first sight, not "love." Even though Naruto feels like he has a lot of chemistry with Sasuke, he doesn't know the real him, just a glimpse of what he saw when Sasuke took him home. All Naruto can say for sure is that he likes Sasuke's appearance, likes how he acts when he's at work, and was interested in how Sasuke acted when he saw him outside of work. It's not much of a foundation. At this point, how is Naruto different than any of Sasuke's other infatuated clients?

Can't wait to see what happens on their second "date"!

Love it

NOW THATS THE TYPE OF COMMENTS I LIKE TO SEE!
thank you very much guest honeslty I was so excited to get this second chapter out that it didnt hit me to actually re check how the first chapter was formated hahah! SO THANK YOU SO MUCH ON THAT CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICSM.

In terms of the story, without revealing to much, yes they will be shitty relashipships (wont tell you who tho :P) and yes Orochimaru will be an issue later on. In terms of Sai there will be issues there, but I still havnt made up my own mind if I was going to make them into a proper couple or not.

And Sasuke does have a different life outside of work, which Naruto will find out, he is completley different, which is why I wrote the summary like that, because there relatioship will be the fun angst part of this story. YAS FOR ANGST MWAHAHAH.

In terms of his job, it is going to play a very important part of the story, and I do like fashion quite a bit, but I honeslty didnt think I did that good. Lol Im preety sure I named every fashion designer I could think of in the second chapter :').

Thank you so much for your feed back and your interest in the story, it really means alot to me! Aswell the crticms was actually helpful :P which most of the time doesnt happen.

For the chapters I think it actually might go to chapter 15, because this idea and world just keeps expanding in my head.

THANK YOU SO MUCH XOOX narutoandsasukearecanon (aka: jaz)

Do you think you could go back and edit the first chapter so the formatting is more like this one? In this chapter, you're formatting the dialogue correctly and starting a new paragraph every time you switch speakers. In the first chapter, all dialogue has been squished together into one paragraph. The dialogue is much harder to follow when it's not in the proper format. I only bring this up because the first chapter is where you either hook readers or lose them. You want to put your best foot forward in the first chapter. If people find your dialogue confusing, they might not continue on to the second chapter.

Anyway, I like this story so far. I like that you've made Naruto the successful one. Sasuke is just a college student. It's possible that Sasuke comes from money, but he's still in school so he isn't successful in his own right yet. It's also possible that Sasuke's family isn't wealthy at all. Why else would he work as much as he does while going to school?

You mentioned angst and possibly other relationships. I can already picture things going very badly between Sai and Naruto. Naruto kind of led Sai on when he kissed him the second time. Naruto also, for some reason, is easily drawn in by Sai, even though he doesn't really like him. There's also the fact that Orochimaru keeps coming back to the bar night after night especially for Sasuke. What kind of relationship do those two have? And finally, we don't know how Sasuke really feels about Naruto. Did he offer to take him home because he's attracted to Naruto, or was he just trying to butter up a potential new client?

Naruto's job is pretty interesting. You put in enough details that it feels like you did some research about the fashion industry, or at least like fashion as a hobby. It's weird, a lot of times when people talk about office work in fanfiction, it feels like the author has never set foot in a professional environment even though I know plenty of them have. You at least managed to make this seem like a credible office environment. I assume because Naruto's job took up the entire second chapter that it's going to play an important role in the story?

Can't wait to see what happens the net time Naruto and Sasuke meet! The summary makes me wonder if Sasuke might disappoint Naruto in some way when he finds out Sasuke isn't as perfect as he seems? (But who could possibly be as perfect as Naruto thinks Sasuke is anyway? ATM, Naruto views Sasuke as some inhuman object of perfection.)