seriously? the author is such a tool. I wish he would have put a "this story is disgusting, immature, and shames frozen and it's characters" tag on it so I wouldn't have wasted my time.

Bronze star.
Granted, your vocabulary is slightly above mediocre. However, your writing is still somewhat, as you so eloquently put it, 'clunky', and you need to check your grammar. At times, you use commas in place of full stops, or not at all. Additionally, seeing as you are blatantly so fond of this poor literary practice, may I point out that exclamation marks and/or question marks do not properly end a sentence. If there is one thing I dislike immensely, it is the incorrect use of punctuation, it makes the whole chapter so annoyingly frustrating to read.
If you want a silver star, take the time to polish this chapter up, or simply get yourself a good beta to catch these rookie mistakes.
Then again, this is only my humble opinion and being as you haven't updated for over a year, my advice will likely fall on deaf ears. Oh well, I shan't bother rating the second chapter.
Kind regards.

Feel free to update at some point...

if anybody still cares i jus wanted to let y'all know im very sorry for not updating in 10 million years! i won't bore you with the details, but simply put my life has pretty much hit a wall and i simply cant write a fanfic at the moment. but i assure you i WILL continue this! it is NOT abondoned! pls be patient, hopefully i can continue soon!

Continue?

Should update that seriously that one of the best story's I ever read even know it's short it was epic

Happy thanksgiving, please continue!

Awesome that was so cool
I hope u keep writing
That left me right at the end of my seat

This is really good and exciting story. The way you introduce conflicts and bringing revelation is really fascinating please update soon

More please! Want to see how this ends

Ok first of all... I love Elsa all quirky. And those who don't are probably not anime lovers!

OMG! I LOVE ANIME TOOOOOOOO! Don't know how I'd survive without it!

I absolutely LOVE this story! !

More please! Can't wait for the familiars

Just read your first 2 chapters and I'm enjoying the story so far, as an idea for an enemy you said you were thinking faries but didn't want them killing cute faries so how about fairies that were combined with other species to try and make an artificial half-ling (like Elsa but mixed with other magic beasts/races) which could then also lead you to have a bigger enemy behind the scenes in the form of the ones doing the experiments, really enjoyed and it so far look forward to more keep up the good work.

Really awesome stuff. You can honestly tell you're not the most experienced of writers, but have excellent potential. You do really well with your grammar, and making sure you're using a wide spread vocabulary and not repeating words in the same sentence. I've seen some pretty good authors on here that still do that, so nice job. You had my attention the whole time, I really liked it. Keep writing! You'll just get better as you go!