Hi there, great story. I have read it three times already. Are you continuing?

The heir to the Emiya clan ain't coming anytime soon...

Wow, even I felt second-hand cockblocked.

Finally! A F/GO Servant Shirou story that isn't crack or pure humor! Why did I not start this sooner!

This is good. I love godako the best. She's nuts!

Affection of seeba is totally a thing. I mean his dad has affection of the holy grail, so why not a version with sabers? Oh boy. I can picture this, saber will be summoned before she can spend time with shirou. Oh boy, her rampage will end Rome.

This fic is a real charm but I’ll admit that the pace can be all over when it wants to be. Other than the sudden lack of focus on Shirou(what was he and Archer doing? Oh god) this chapter, I can’t find too much fault. Really looking forward to the future

Great work!

give me more motherfucker

Gonna keep this going?

The only thing i dont like about this fic, are the name you gave to gudako. Gabby just sounds oc tbh

update

This was something that I thought was supposed to be fluff, but overall it's shaping up to have quite a fun plot! :) Not that there is anything wrong with fluff and no plot... afterall I was here for the fluff, but got unexpected plot as well. Bonus!

However, more fluff please. That and of course we need more Alter, because whats Arturia's is hers, and that includes Shirou afterall. Maybe her walking around wearing one of Arturia's dresses and speaking in a more reserved fashion? Its the lack of the ahoge that gives it away for Shirou, but not after she's managed to drag him off to a secluded area for snogs... of course Shirou is flustered, but Alter doesn't see a problem with it- "Deception is a valid tactic in war, is it not?"

"This isn't a war, Alter. You can't just-"

"All is fair in love of war." Alter's head bobs as she closes her eyes and nods sagely.

"I'm pretty sure it goes 'All is fair in love *and* war'-"

"Yes, indeed. Either is correct. Now stop stalling and woo me, fool. I do not have enough time for you to waste for you to just stand there and gawk. Show me how you managed to seduce the King. If you prove to be... adequate, I just might permit your relationship to continue, and you may service me as well."

"You do not get to tell me who I can love, Alter."

"Bah, your agency was forfeit the moment you pledged yourself to the King. You love her, therefor you love me. You should be grateful that I'm allowing a commoner such as yourself the opportunity to kiss these royal lips."

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LOL That and of course Lily. She's got such a huge crush that it wouldn't be right if she wasn't included in the action. Although I'm really curious as to what Nero's and Arturia's relationship is here considering that Gabby wanted to warn her that Nero was in the singularity.

I don't dislike the story's current focus, but I must confess- I do prefer Shirou hijinks. That being said, your own continued investment in the work should be the greatest factor in your decision on how to proceed. I'd certainly much prefer a story that has limited focus on my favorite characters over the possibility of no more story at all.

In any case- I appreciate the work you've put in thus far, and I'm looking forward to where you take the story next.

While i am liking this fic, I would like more Shirou in it as promised.