I loved it, you really painted a picture. And I really like the last sentence. "It's okay to grieve kid, just don't let the guilt rule you, what's done is done, you can't change the past so work for your present and future Ed, and know that we will always be there for you" I loved it your a a wonderful storyteller

This was lovely. One detail I really liked was that Mustang picked up the watchI had even thought while Roy got Ed back to his house about how Ed had thrown itbecause it's that sort of attention to detail that makes a story great. You handled their emotions really well. Thanks for writing!

you're gonna make me CRY
seriously when ed started crying in front of the fire, i felt it start to come, and then when roy HUGGED him i felt it coming faster, and then Ed asked if he was a coward and it was RIGHT THERE... i managed to fight it off thankfully, but man I was so close.
This was absolutely excellent. The only thing I'd like to mention is that even when you're using quotations, which is technically punctuation, you should still be ending those sentences in the quotations with a period, exclamation point, or question mark! It helps it flow easier and gives it a more finished look!
I've been listening to true colors and god if that isnt the mood of this story. it feels like it as Roy reminds him that he was fighting to fix his mistake...

Have a great day, and thank you for sharing your lovely work with us!

~YAJJ

Beautiful.