Reviews for The Lone Wolf at Hogwarts |
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JackLotz chapter 4 . 3/1 Please write more! |
ranko lina Inverse chapter 4 . 1/5 I like this story plz sir I want some more |
Foalan21 chapter 4 . 12/19/2019 Impressive |
enji-benjy chapter 4 . 11/20/2019 Why is this called 'The Loan Wolf at Hogwarts' when you clearly had no intention of that being true since you are writing 'NOBLE Team at Hogwarts'? |
BoredKing chapter 4 . 8/20/2019 Interesting. |
chaoswizard chapter 4 . 6/27/2019 keep it coming plz it is good |
Enterprize 1304a chapter 4 . 6/22/2019 This is great please update. |
davycrockett100 chapter 4 . 5/25/2019 awesome |
Guest chapter 4 . 5/8/2019 I am really enjoying this, thankyou for writing it |
levi.hall.9279 chapter 4 . 5/6/2019 Thoroughly enjoyed the chapter and I am eagerly anticipating the next one |
Duel chapter 2 . 5/3/2019 I just want to point out that "Project: ORCHID", the augmentation procedure that is used on the S-IVs actually takes over three weeks, as its requirements aren't as stringent as "Project: CHRYSANTHEMUM"(the S-III's augmentation procedure), much less "Project: ASTER"(the S-II's). Not only are there chemical enhancements, but there is a skeletal graft/modification procedure like that of the S-II's(S-IVs are infused with a Skeletal fullerene lattice, making their bones as tough as steel), along with reinforced joints(or straight up replaced), along with several implants(a specialized neural implant for interfacing with an AI, one for increasing reaction time, and one for medics to track and monitor the Spartans), muscle grafting surgery, organ transplant, and gene therapy. So Harry/Six should've been in there for a lot longer(the first batch of S-IVs, including CMDR Sarah Palmer, needed two days, post-augmentations, just to learn how to WALK AGAIN), even in a slipspace bubble a la Trevelyan(aka Onyx). Do note we STIIL do not know the full extent of Forerunner engineering in Halo. Another thing: I've seen many a story whose author kinda hand wave how Halo-tech get from the 26th century into the 20th century hellhole that is Wizarding London. I just hope that you give a somewhat decent explanation for it. If ANY, hopefully. As a Spartan, Six of all people should understand operational secrecy, and wouldn't just divulge top secret information to civilians, much less shit the CIA, MI6, and ESPECIALLY ONI themselves, would classify so much that it's practically a page full of black ink censors. But I guess it's justified in that ONI(and by extension, the UNSC) doesn't really exist here, so you can't really be prosecuted for revealing information that "technically" doesn't exist. YET. As a little suggestion(feel free to disregard), you could make it so that the rest of NOBLE are found in countries where they would've likely originated from(Carter and Emile from America. You can have them be older wizards from Ilvermorney, or be muggles. Jorge is from Hungary, as from his Hungarian accent and descent, which WOULD put him in Durmstrang if he was a wizard. But I highly doubt he would WANT to stay, considering his personality). Kat has a bit of a Scottish/British accent in the game, so you get a pass from me for using Hermione. It WOULD be interesting if Thom-A293 joined them too, but that's highly unlikely, now is it? As long as none of them is Ron, as he was canonically a bit of a cowardly prick(especially after what he did in year 4. *I* wouldn't have let him off that easily after that year's worth of BS he pulled). I'm EXTREMELY suspicious of that AI, if only because I don't fully trust her. (In other news: water is wet. Who knew?) And I wonder if Six will get outside help in setting up shop in Hogsmead, or even Hogwarts itself? UNSC tech DOES look pretty resilient against the Wizarding World's idea of a tech jammer. Not to mention the possible implications of using Forerunner tech. All in all, it's still a very interesting story you've come up with. Hope to see the next update soon. |
TheGreatSeeker chapter 4 . 5/4/2019 Yay a new chapter! |
Guest chapter 4 . 5/1/2019 an update I must be seeing things could be longer though |
mako234 chapter 4 . 5/2/2019 More Please! |
Dr1zzy chapter 4 . 5/2/2019 Interesting start |