Reviews for Spiderman Homecoming - Breath
AkaDeca chapter 1 . 8/9/2018
Great one shot
Guest chapter 1 . 8/3/2018
Peter / Harry / Gwen Love Triangle
. The three met in the Decathlon World Cup. Gwen showed interest in Peter, who is not interested. Gwen and Harry developed a close friendship, but Gwen is still fixated on Peter.
. In September, Gwen and Kate are MSSH's newest students. Kate studied biomedics while Gwen is a law major. Gwen developed a romantic obsession with the ' man whom she never ought to fall in love with '
. Gwen became one of Peter's minions and closest friends. Gwen rivals Peter in literally EVERYTHING : popularity, dancing talents, issuing sarcastic comments, basically everything
. Everyone can see how fixated Gwen is on Peter. In the Inhumans movie, Gwen and Peter developed a love/ hate relationship. Later after the Inhumans movie, Peter cruelly rejected hwe.
. The response : Gwen slapped Peter so hard to the point Peter had to wear hearing aids for the rest of his life. And since Gwen came from Europe's most powerful blue blood family, Gwen was never charged for this physical offence. This enraged Peter so much he did not speak to her for a whole month.
. In fact, many boys are in love with the beautiful European princess. Even Jill commented that her debut to society was much more successful than her older cousins. However, heartbroken Gwen forced herself to move on. Gwen is also a natural flirt who seduced the other boys to make Peter jealous.
. At the start of the sumer term, Harry finally dumped Betty and Betty went through an extreme near suicidal mode. Gwen appointed Harry as her flirting Buddy whilst playing confidant to Betty. Little did they know it was Peter who exposed Harry's womanizing ways to Betty ON THE WEB. This is also when Peter finally started to notice Gwen.
. Gwen basically ignores Peter every time Peter tries to be nice to her or talk to her. But by June the two friends started to rekindle their old friendship and became much closer than ever, much to Harry's dismay. They even are prom dates
. In the summer, Gwen, Peter and Harry looked back on their memories and realized all three learned a lot in the intense love triangle.
- Gwen learned to never take too much pride in judgements, that it is wrong to lie, that it is okay to be weak, that money can't buy her love. She was incredibly ashamed of her conduct and dreaded to see Peter again in senior year.
- Peter learned that the real world can have the most unexpected people, that the world he grew up in never stays the same, that people can be deceitful
- Harry learned the price of being a player, that he has to take responsibility, and that he has think of others feelings
..In senior year, Harry watchedbin painful silcence as Peter and Gwen are closer than ever and eventually became a romantic couple.
. However, Gwen is accepted to go yo MIT foundation. Instead of throwing a tantrum like most teen boyfriends, Peter accepted the fact Gwen is leaving his school and wished her happiness. He and Harry studied harder because of Gwen's achievements
. Peter became a frequent visitor to MIT, eventually matchmaking Liz and Harry.
Guest chapter 1 . 8/3/2018
Spiderman : Far From Home ideas
. The MSSH Decathlon Team are going to represent USA in the Decathlon World Cup in London in the summer.
. They meet their rival team : Coles Academic School of Science. This is where the main teen characters from Ms. Marvel appear, including Kamala Khan, who was 14 at that time.
. New characters
- Gwen Stacy : Composite of Silver Sable and the original Gwen, Gwen's parents are both political magnates. Because her attachment to her dead mother is so strong, it became a major plothole in the movie She is also the new captain of the Coles Decathlon team, after Paul Stacy.
- Jill and Paul Stacy : Gwen's 18 year old twin cousins. Paul is quiet and serious, while Jill is outgoing and fiery with auburn hair.
- Kate Bishop : Based on the Ultimate edition of her character.
. Gwen is interested in Peter, who showed zero interest. Peter and Harry being selected to become Gwen's new potential suitors by her father is the start of the infamous love triangle that lasted a full year.
. Cindy is fixated on Paul, and signs of budding romance exist between Kate and Abe.
ASuperHugeNerd chapter 1 . 8/3/2018
I really love this! I always felt like after a fight like that, Peter most definitely needed medical attention, so this was very satisfying. I also appreciate the mention of Peter's fast metabolism and how he should eat more being brought to Tony's attention.
fxrefliess chapter 1 . 11/1/2017
Hiya. I would like to personally be your first review.

Well..that's why I'm reviewing right now. I love reviews. Don't you? Okay, I'll get to the point now.

All in all, this was a good story. It was quite enjoyable. Now - please don't take this the wrong way - but you did have some common mistakes such as: run-ons and dialogue problems. But fear not, fellow fanfiction-er! Everyone makes mistakes. We're human.

...at least I hope your human. It'd be weird to see like a dog typing a story out on the computer after they enjoyed and understood a movie and its plot. Not that I have anything against dogs, or not-human-ers, I guess you could call 'em!

Oh, I should just...
...moving on!

I can see this happening when the movie cut off, okay? It's understandable. With Peter refusing to go to a doctor, and the fast metabolism. Although it was quick and short in some spots; not enough description. I guess that's okay in this story because we already saw the film. We already know how everything and everyone looks.

Great job, all in all. If you were to make a second chapter, I would totally read it.

And I'd be pleased to see you on one - or more? - of my stories. I have a few good Spider-Man fanfictions and a ton others!

Until next time,
~felyD
Guest chapter 1 . 10/26/2017
For a quick one shot in class, this was really well thought out. It was really nice, and the characters were all great.
Have a good day/night!