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Thx for the chapter. Do whichever way is easier for you on the fixes

Closure is the best medicine. So when does he get his true zanpakuto

well first thing first i would post the revision alongside the new chapters that way if someone new read it they know to come back to see if the story does have new chapters coming out. Also about parasite its ending is a cliffhanger since I still confused on what is technically happening by the quincy or that this after the original canon story. As far as I know the fullbringer arc is done already

wtf

I don't want to ridicule this fic, but I definitely have mixed feelings about it. The fights don't feel forced, per se, but rather they feel stupid in the reasoning behind them. I can take some of the reasons, but when they just keep on coming because of ONE THING someone said at THIS TIME, it gets kind of dull and annoying. That being said, the writing itself actually holds up pretty well. I'd be glad to see more of this if it stops getting convoluted, because it seems like there's unnecessary conflict at every corner.

Thx for the story im really enjoying it

Oh. Okay. So for some reason Ichigo stoped training. Okay. But did Yasaka forget that Ichigo sacrificed his power to defeat Aizen? Okay. Okay.

First, if Grimmjaw is still an Arrancar, than he doesnot need to eat. He can but does not have to.
Also what it is with authors that keep making Ichigo a weak ignorant bitch? And if it is a crossover than they make him have some hex or illness so they can justify him getting his ass kicked and having him turned into a servant?
Like that dressing down Kintaro did. It does not make Ichigo look incompetent. It makes Kintaro look like a arrogant asshole. "I was hoping to see a strong hero, but now I see a weak bitch." For someone who learned his story, Kintaro can not see a whole picture.

I'm going to keep this one short, but it's adding to my other review. There is one other major problem in this story, maybe two depending on how you see it. Everything is needlessly convoluted and a lot of dialogue/characters just seem outright stupid. I can understand it to an extent with the hex on Ichigo, but it's with at least 1/3 characters.

They just do things that seem dumb. There is also a myriad of lines, a shit ton of them from Yasaka, that are just stupid, not only in their reasoning but their execution as well. I can ignore this as the rest of the fic holds up decently (ignoring my other review's stuff), but I feel like it would make a large number of people just want to rage quit the story.

I really feel like you need to go through and rethink some of the reasoning of why characters act the way they do so they do not seem so out of character. If you're looking from somewhere to start I'd suggest Yasaka with her hero speech as its just...not that great.

I can't. I just can't anymore. The writing's enjoyable but it's so god damned slow. I feel like nothing of note will have really happened even if I read to chapter 11. It's more than annoying. The stuff with Yasaka was tolerable, but throughout the entire thing a single thought ran through my mind.

Why should I care? Seriously, There's been no real stakes and, so far, this story has subverted my expectations in a bad way. I feel like the drive for a good story is there, but everything is so underdeveloped that I just can't get into it. It feels like you opened up your story on a filler arc.

I can see some small things being put into that will help later on, but other than that things are just...boring for me? I don't really have a way to describe it. It's interesting, but nothing goes how I'd expect it to go. Sometimes, this could be good, but in this story it just ends up annoying me more than anything else.

It feels like things could end up playing out well, but semiconsistent updates (at least once a month) I doubt I'd be able to stay interested. I'd just end up forgetting a bunch of deatails constently while not being able to keep track of what happened in the past. I might come back to this later at some point, but for now at least, it's driving me insane. It almost feels like the story would have been better served if you had opened up with Serafall and Ichigo getting involved somehow and then moved onto the stuff with Yasaka. I think that would have helped mitigate the thought of, "Why does this matter?" for a lot of stuff.

I kinda rambled a bit, but I'm going to give a TLDR to sum up evreything.

TLDR: I think this story is almost unbearably slow. I could handle that if there is an enourmous amount of content (kinda like some Chinese novels), but it doesn't have that. Add the update times in with that and things get real rocky.

Gay alert!, Gay alert! So lame.

Beautiful chapter especially at the end bit there good job.

Good

finally,we're getting somewhere. Love this...Keep it coming but try not to burn yourself out