aaaaaaaaaaaa i love this and especially the characterisation of the asl bros. oooohhh and the humour is just on point too!

update please 3 i love story

Hi really like the story. I haven't seen any good stories with mythology zone devil fruits that are not cancelled and abandoned so I am eagerly awaiting an update.

*Sorry it posted the review while I was still writing it. Final points: I think Sabo did come across a bit OOC this chapter as I think forcing anyone to work with the Army would also be antethical to the philosophy of the Army and he should know that. On the other hand you've started hinting that the future was not as rosy as was previously hinted at with Luffy. This makes me very curious. Tone is up to you and hard to significantly shift midway realistically. Thank you for writing and posting!

Overall, very interesting story. I think Finn is my favorite of your OCs. I'm definitely excited to see what more he could do in a fight with his DF. Reading about a big crew that isn't as well established as the WB crew is certainly i but I could definitely see merit in reducing to the essentials, although that could be a bit tricky to do in the story.

Rereading it again. Hope you can update soon (y)

Love this! The story is different than most of ASL time-travel that I have read so far. I like how Ace doesn't resent Roger here and even uses his name! The three brothers having a clash every now and then... that's realistic. Since they use to be a leader on their own. But I wonder how this newest clash between Ace and Sabo will turn out. Hope to see Ace showing the marines his true strength though. So far people only deemed him to be dangerous because he claimed to be Roger's son right? Thank you for writing this!

Hope you update soon. This is just too perfect. I like how Ace actually uses his real name and accept Roger's as his father. His interaction with Luffy and Sabo is so realistic too. Love love this! Really hope to see how Shanks, Whitebeard, and Rayleigh are going to act once they meet the crew!

Just reread this for fun. While it was hard to keep track of the OCs reading it in pieces, they're fairly memorable when you read it in one go. This is a really intriguing idea of having them all sail together and change what is going on in the world. I particularly love that Luffy got to meet Dragon.

What I would suggest is maybe more indications of how much time has passed/the setting near the beginning of chapters. For example, when Bepo was found, I thought she was talking about the cat and didn't know I was in a different scene. I also think you need to thin your crew down since it's not very believable for Luffy at least to not be very familiar with his crew, though I guess this attack is your opportunity to leave it more to the OCs you already created.

Agreed on the no romance. While I find this story sometimes gets to angsty (I'm sorry but Azure and his angst this past chapter made me roll my eyes), I do think you balance it out nicely with nakamaship and everyone getting the chance to goof off at times.

Update please!

wow

This is still very cliffhangy, but it's not making me as anxious as last chapter, so I forgive you. I like realism, but I would appreciate it if the tone was sunny most of the time. I don't think you should scrape the larger crew at this point, maybe in the future when there's even more people they can decide to have units in different ships, so you can keep only the principals with the captains', but they will still have their fleet.
I hope Sabo and Ace can get past their differences fast. Mostly I hope that Sabo will see that no matter how important the fight against the world government is, it means nothing if the revolutionaries start behaving like the world government, even if just a bit.
I'm also worried that Luffy having told Franky will just start another fight and cause Luffy even more pain at the moment.

You're making me nervous. Even disregarding all the important stuff that is unfinished this chapter had two cliffhangers, TWO! This shouldn't be allowed, it's basically a war crime and should have been included in the Geneva convention.

Lovely chapter. I'm particularly happy about how things turned out with Smoker, I hope he learns to feel less misgivings about being a pirate with time, though. I'm curious about what exactly that not island is.

Finn's fruit was surprising and very interesting, when he first turned into his dog form I was super confused.