Reviews for The Ninja Overlord Part 1: Rise of an Overlord!
Primarx chapter 17 . 7/22
can't come up with idea for foxes and girls right away but as for barrier in most stories I read it can only detect unauthorized ppl entering and in some can also detect all ppl entering and leaving. the idea that barrier can detect whenever whoever is too op. Hyuga incident would become impossible in the way it happened, also tobi would have been detected stalking kakashi, visiting grave and murdering uchiha. if u still want to use barrier as it is in your story than control in some way at least 1 person responsible for the barrier/magic can hide from barrier detection/ break the barrier in the present or in the past (during fox attack for example) and as it was an uzumaki fuinjutsu other folks can't restore it completely or at all/ change barrier properties in your story/ naruto or one of his allies know sealing to help deal with it.
Redlinner chapter 17 . 5/25
Yo!
I suggest you to re-read the Pain arc. How the bodies have infiltrate the village without alarm? because the kuchiyose no jutsu( summon technic).
Otherwise? Akane (Or Naruko) can help for the girls of futur (and train their for the Uzumaki clan).

What do you think?
Rairi Valelira chapter 16 . 5/1
I ship it
Rairi Valelira chapter 13 . 5/1
Oh heck. And yay. Lol
Rairi Valelira chapter 12 . 5/1
Wallet-kun is back!
Rairi Valelira chapter 10 . 5/1
Enough with the flashbacks damn... it would have been less annoying if they were put in earlier so that you didn't go back several years in the story. Switching between point of view is not taboo you know.
Rishi2001 chapter 6 . 4/26
ok but learning and explaining part is boring...I just skip
Rishi2001 chapter 6 . 4/26
wow Bro ..
You went such high length to create this depth in this story's background its Great and everything makes sense
willam and jack and jake chapter 17 . 4/18
ok then
1529 chapter 17 . 4/18
A couple of comments...

First the barrierMadara' got past the barrier to help massacre the Uchiha so it can't be completely without flaw. Similarly, Itachi and Kisame were in the village with no problems... Honestly, with the number of issues that Konoha had throughout the story, it seems that the barrier is more of a rumor than an actually effective technique.

Second, the kitsune: I don't recall how it was originally worded, but a loophole could be found perhaps because Naruto adopted them prior to being a ninja. Laws with ridiculously stupid loopholes are written all the time,it would not be out of the ordinary for something like that to occur.

Thanks for writing.
Uzushiogakure chapter 17 . 4/17
I don't see what the problem is with using the minion gate because if I remember correctly it is a teleportation system and if that's the case of long as the gate is inside of the barrier it would not be able to detect detect when someone uses it to teleport in or out after all teleportation techniques are extremely rare in the Shinobi World so even if the barrier could detect teleportation techniques which I highly highly doubt it can because Obito can get into the village undetected using his, so even if it could I'm pretty sure it would only be able to detect whatever form of teleportation technique the creator knows the mechanics of and I highly doubt minion Gates would be on that list. And I'm willing to bet that the barrier around the village can only detect chakra and so none chakra users like minions would be completely invisible to it they'd be able to pass through without being detected.

In any case in short I don't see any problems with using the minion gate because as long as it's inside the barrier and the exit point is outside the barrier, then those using the gate should be completely unnoticed as far as the barrier is concerned.
Guest chapter 17 . 4/15
well maybe if you finished a story instead of making 1 or 2 chapters then making a new story.
Robert77833 chapter 17 . 4/17
Is there any chance of you continuing your HP stories while this is on hold? That would be amazing.
highrise75 chapter 17 . 4/15
I dont know about the rest but im pretty sure the barrier only detects things going through so as long as the minion gate was inside the barrier it should be fine because it would bypass instead of going through the barrier
doubledamn chapter 17 . 4/15
The village is surrounded by a wall, right? The Barrier, does it detect people trying to get via Chakra use? You might be able to bypass it using non-chakra techniques to scale the Wall. Even if it wasn't originally a hole in the defences, I could see Danzo arguing that maintaining the non-chakra aspects of the Barrier was a waste of time and money, either to fund other projects, or because maintaining the Barrier would give people a wider knowledge of Fuinjutsu.
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