So cute

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This is so creative! Something like this has never been written as far as I know and all of the writing made sense! This is possibly the best story I've read! The paragraphs were a bit hard to read but otherwise it was perfect. How did you get the idea? They were'nt out of character once! All of it was so real! This is a great story and you should definatly write more rockman storys.

As decent as the story is, the formatting needs a lot of work. From the very start of the prologue on, the reader is hit with a massive wall of text that doesn't let up.

There a few spelling errors and awkward sentences scattered throughout as well. A bit of re-working could really kick the whole work up a few notches.

It's never too late to dust off an old work, so please, hand this one off to a good beta for a final polish.

aww! i loveed it!

definately a fave!

I loved this! *squeals*

Thanks for writing such an awesome fic! If you do get time, please do write a sequel (if you haven't already that is ;)!

Thankyou

~mi _

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Aww! That was such an awesome fanfic! Got to it through Moonymonster's favorites, so I guess I shouldn't really have been so surprised... except... it was exactly what I was looking for, even though I didn't know it! Truly, truly fantastic.

Usually after a nice, long fic like this, I've got a list of a dozen things that need improving... but here...? It really was too good. I guess the only thing that rubbed me the wrong way AT ALL was from the first real chapter, when Rockman freaks out so much about Netto's dream about Saito. Did you explain that in the story, and I just forgot? (That's entirely possible, I hate to admit, given that it's now after one am and my brain's a little fried...) As I said, it's not a BIG deal, just something that didn't quite make sense to me... it seemed like it was supposed to be explained later, but wasn't.

What I really love, especially in retrospect, is the prologue. It was kind of confusing, just out of the blue like that... but now I like it. I especially like that you dealt so well (and, frankly, constantly) with that issue of morality in Dr. Hikari having "saved" Saito. That's something that's always kinda sickened me about the series... I'm always a bit too sensitive about the power differentials in anime (such as the dependence Pokémon have on their trainers), and while it makes sense having Navis be submissive to their operators, having a dead boy playing the role of computer program just seemed... not nice. Actually, this fic did more to justify this role to me than anything else I've read or had people argue to me before. While pretty much everyone portrays Dr. Hikari as a loving father, there's still sometimes something about him that makes one feel he's secretly thinking, "Lookit me, I can play God!" Same thing with Netto sometimes, too... obsessive netbattler, rambunctious but caring brother, and god-modder. Made me feel rather sorry for poor little Saito. But this fic gave such a realistic representation of it that their relationships actually seem rather... nice to me now. And that's a welcome change.

So... yeah! Great fic, well-written, fantastic plot... perfect spelling and grammar, even with the Japanese (which was, I thank you, kept to a merciful minimum!)... and hey, whaddya know, I've never played the games either. So we've got something in common there. *grins* So at least to a layman's eye, this fic was superb. I've got no complaints, and so I suppose I shall leave it here, with one final "Great job!"

"pixels bleeding from unhealed wounds."

Dammit, that's a fantastic description for it. Why the hell didn't I think of it? _

Anyway, did I mention I loved this fic? And that it was well-written, well-paced, and pretty much well everything? And that I basically love all your fics and am huge fan? I thought so...

_ I love the ending. I just do. And the scene with Blues getting the e-mail is... um... great. Words fail me. I liked it. Yeah...

*pokes* Yeah, what about that Twin Signal fic?

I'm afraid I can't add much to this chapter either, except "OMG, so cool!" *coughs* You write the technical bits well, and believable- I just kinda make stuff up and hope it's believable. *coughs again* You incorporated the concepts from all three versions (?) of extremely well (one of these days I'll just get tired of that word ). I wonder-if Enzan's a Net Agent (?), does he do that on top of being the vice president of IPC? If so, then I wanna know what kinda drug he's on to juggle all that-I need some of it.

Um... the only thing I can come up with is wow, I swear. I'm sorry, I'm not being very helpful, am I? You write for Rockman extremely well. I'm jealous. ;;

You've reminded me that I forgot to put a disclaimer up in my own story. Oh well. ;;

I'm trying to come up with some positive comments that don't boil down to "OMG, so cul rit mre!" The best things I can come up with is that fact that you do the conversation between Netto and Rock have extremely well, the chapter flow is excellent, and your characterization is spot on. I wonder why you type out Doctor Hikari instead of just shortening it to "Dr.", but then, I'm not sure which is the preferred usage. Either way is probably fine, and it doesn't interfere with the flow of the story. _

I was going to review the whole fic at once, but I don't think I could do it justice that way. When I read this sequence the first time, I understood everything right away. When I read it through the second time, I spent five minutes trying to figure out how the hell I did that, seeing as you don't indicate the speaker until the end of the chapter. Then I finally figured it out. ;; You characterized each speaker so well that it's nearly impossible to tell who isn't speaking-a rare gift in writing. I avoid such sequences because I mistrust my skill to do it, but you pulled it off fantastically. _

The only part about this that confused me was the "unfamiliar woman". She's been speaking to him about her son's obsession, and yet by the time she leaves, she's still unfamiliar? I dunno; I can kinda see what you're getting at, but the word choice threw me off.

Great story. got me thinking. i hope you make another, keep up the good work

aww...that's such a cute story! keep up the good work!