Date made: 2003
Damn this is an old story, makes me feel old. Great story m8.

So far it's a decent story at the very least, although I can only hope that at some point you bring in a Beta to proofread this thing, even retroactively since, judging by how the last chapter is labeled 'epilogue' the story is probably finished. There are a number of small mistakes. Most notably whenever Shinji is experiencing that other place. It's in that sort of setting that you start forgetting to put periods into place.

And that combined with how you decided to leave thoughts completely unmarked, as opposed to written in italics or enclosed in some other manner, 'like this for instance', can help things get really confusing when it comes to who is saying what or thinking what as opposed to it being descriptive or narrative text.

A good story, so far at least, with a good plot, but seriously get someone to go through this thing with a fine-toothed comb.

God, That was a truly epic fic. Haven't read many fics that can top this.

Great story!

Nice, groovin' fic that, despite several glaring grammatical errors, managed to captivate me and keep me entertained for several hours.

-Phun-k P4L

This is fanfiction worth reading and rereading over and over. I just started reading this, and typically I don't offer my opinions to the end unless I'm doing a line-by-line crit, but I felt like I had to point out the fact that the author uses a very unique and refreshing narrative structure, jumping from character to character without it becoming confusing. The results are terrifyingly real. Job well done.

~N

read this in one go very good thankyou

This has been pretty good. Since I can go ahead and make assumptions regarding the outcome, I have decided to assume that Shinji still has the know how and ability to use his AT field and blow stuff up (on the premis that once known, anyone could do it(alternatly, only Rei and he can since they have the genitic makeup) and it is probably just less powerful now.) and hid this fact so that he could get out. And as far as who he chooses, I prefer Rei, but in some cases (like this one) I say he should be with both. Although, with Misato's actions, maybe this will be a case of all three once they are older? Well, whatever. Anyway, this was a good story. Good job.

Great story, man. Just great. The build-up to the plot was well done and when you finally hit the climax you really delivered. The battle scenes were well written and never drawn out and I really appreciate the "Happy Ending". Too often I churn through an EVA story only to find out that everyone dies in the end in some freak accident *cough* True Love Waits *cough*.

Great work and I hope to see a lot more EVA fics outta you.

BD

That was certainly interesting. I've always wondered exactly how Gendo's version of Third Impact would have been different from SELEE's. Though I dobut what you wrote of Gendo's version is what Hideaki Anno had in mind, it *is* entirely plausible.

That you were able to complete this story without pair is short of miraculous. In so many ways could Shinji have been trapped into the proverbial hot seat and yet he escapes (getting shot is indeed a fastidious way of getting out of such occasion o_O) Very enjoyable, and despite the fact that I am three years late on submitting a review, I hope it isn’t an annoyance to you that I do so.

Now onto your other 6 fictions!

All I can say is that this is simply amazing. Your writing flows, you have an EXCELLENT grasp on the characters as well as a show. You kept it filled with humor, action, romance, and just in all kept it entertaining. I loved it. Looking forward to reading your other works to!

In fan fiction, there are the long epics of heroic acts and unconquerable odds. There are fics depicting tragic events, unparralleled drama, and life scarring content. There are fics that simply mess with your your head, fics that make you question your outlook on reality, fics that make make you laugh your head off...

And then...

And then there are fics like these that simply leave with a warm, fuzzy feeling inside, that just make you feel GOOD about life in general, and have an incomprehensibly posative effect on your outlook on life, the universe and everything. This fic made me feel like a million bucks after every chapter. I don't know how you managed it, but this fic was simply wonderful.

Brilliant work!

nice to see that u can complete a work. i do enjoy reading it, even though the only saving grace is your self imposed angst in your announcemnets. finish your other works when you get the chance!

This is one of the better stories I've read lately.

It does lurch back and forth unsettlingly between WAFF/sitcom and angst, but overall it's decent.

And I liked the fact that you're confident enough to use an ACC in a significant role and creative enough to have an ACC that isn't a Mary Sue.

I also liked your characterization of Ritsuko-she's complex, underappreciated, and underused in fanfic; too many people only see the intimidating "mad scientist" side of her and turn her into Ilsa, She-Wolf of the SS, because they don't see that, for all her scientific brilliance, she's also a naive and childlike woman who thinks (or thought) that Gendo loves her as much as she loves him. Your Ritsuko is, like the one in the series, a basically decent and sympathetic person who thinks of the things she's done and wonders if she's beyond redemption. I like the psychological complexity you brought out for her.

I think Gendo is a more complex, more tragic figure than you show here-still a villain, but a sad little man whose motivations are understandable in a twisted sort of way-but what you wrote works.

Anyway, I'm very favorably impressed with what I've seen of your work. I get the impression that you're busy, but I think we'd like to see you write more, when and as your busy schedule permits. Thanks.