So close minded, still an asshole, but getring better, slowly very slowly, the cussing please delete ir, I have never seen a fanfic where the mc cusses as much as you do, I cringe everytime I here it.
All in all rhis is a good concept, though rewrite it please with less cussing, and with, less living in a fanfiction, only seeing them as a fictional character, thats too cringeworthy.

Please rewrite ir.

This has so much potential.

I cant, sorry, your mc us a total a. hole

Too much cussing. I'm fck outta here author!

I tried reading this story, I really did, but I'm gonna have to stop.

The main reason?

The OC is literally one of the most annoying characters I have ever read about. I think at this point, I would rather read about a about a Gary Stu OC who actually acts like a decent and normal human being instead reading about this jackass.

I can't even take him seriously with the non-stop cringe jokes, the constant 4th wall breaking, his habit of poking his nose into matters that have absolutely nothing to do with him (like him standing there and suddenly getting the idea of wanting to play matchmaker for Jaune and Pyrrha 'just because') and overall being so irritating that I can't help but want to deck him in the face.

No offense to you author, you seem like a cool guy, but next time when making a story, make your OC a character that people can actually take seriously and not have him act like a bumbling fool with absolutely no redeeming qualities, because I don't even know why anyone would even like this guy.

Well, glad to see you aren't dead and this isn't a dead fic. I have multiple things that I want to say. Having the whole Loki/Beryl connection is confusing in the way of the plot. Does our boy actually have amnesia? And he should start to remember bits of this past. As way of Yang, try to flesh out her character as someone who raised two children on her own at the age of seven, so she would be doting and treat Beryl as if he was made of glass since she just recently got him back. As for Ruby, try to have her try to hang out with her twin more to make up for lost time and do twin things, like Dipper and Mabel dynamic from Gravity Falls I suppose. As for Weiss, I would prefer if you paired Beryl and Weiss together due to that whole "you're your own person" speech and they have good chemistry with each other. This is just my opinion, but I'm not a fan of Blake. She's flighty and abondoned Yang at the end of season three without so much as a goodbye and abuses Sun throughout four. I understand that she was born into the Fang, but she is extremely hypocritical of Weiss due to the similar birth status of one another, both princesses in their own right.

I really enjoy this story and has a lot of potential if it had consistent upload schedules, say once a month. Really looking forward to the next chapter.

Nice and refreshing change of pace good for the canon tag along so far with small enough au material that it is still pretty much all ruby. All an all a nice read and i hope to read more soon.

Great chapter. Please continue

Almost a year. You haven't updated for almost a year!
I hope that you continue updating this story.

"Each pair must be must choose must choose one and return to the top of the cliff" uhh what? aside from that good story.

Yessss

Brotha I need an update

on behalf of everyone, we're gonna need some more chapters. im enjoying the read bro

Just got done with a binge of this. I like how you made the character essentially ‘aware’ that he is in a ‘Cliche OC insert RWBY fanfic’, and acts accordingly. Brilliant move!

Any chance on an update soon? I actually really want to know what happens next.

Hope u update soon

I need more.