Please add more chapters

Continue this story please

It's always stupid when a character thinks it's odd when they call someone beautiful or pretty.

Don’t you wanna continue with this story , please do something it’s really good

This story promises a lot, and this pairing is very good but it's a shame that you hardly find stories focused on them, just think in harem and this is one of the few focused on them alone so please do not stop this story.

Very good story, I look forward to the next chapter that comes soon

Very good story, I look forward to the next chapter

Will this story continue?

Please Update! This ship is so underrated and is one of the fics best ones out of the few i was able to find.

So I've read the remaining five chapters and my initial review still holds true.

I see that you have several other stories, longer and with a wider reader base, but going by how this is written, your writing would benefit quite a bit from a beta reader as I mentioned before. I don't know if you really edit your chapters after writing them or it's just a superficial fixing of errors and typos (because editing is more than just that) but I kept seeing awkward phrasing that just doesn't fit, needless repetitions of some things... things like that.

Natsu as a character improved as the chapters went by, though. He sounded more like Natsu, which is good.

However, I dont recognize this Irene at all, I have to say. The one I remember is calm, collected and cool but that's just the outer layer that hides all the cruelty and the more darker aspects of her personality. The Irene we see in the manga is definitely not a nice or a sane person, but nothing of that is seen here so far.

First, she giggles constantly around Natsu, which puts her at odds with how she should act in my opinion. Her character isn't prone to doing that, from what I remember, and the narrative treats it as a genuine thing, instead of a persona Irene puts on to put Natsu at ease or something. What's more, she's described repeatedly as having joy with Natsu and other similar things and that's... no, that's just no. Without any kind of previous character development, we must assume Irene is the same as in the manga and that's not what we're seeing inn this fic.

Second, Irene hated her child. Having forgotten the reasons for why she abandoned her, Irene thought she abandoned her out of disgust and thinking she was trash, not because she realized she was a danger to Erza. Given that she doesn't seem to have remembered that moment yet, she'd still regard her child with contempt - and that isn't something that comes across in the small moment she thinks of her.

I know this seems like a very small and minor detail, but it's precisely this kind of attention to detail to keep the characters as true to their real self as possible that sets apart a good fic from the rest.

Also, chapters 3 and 4 could have easily been one single chapter since little beyond Natsu returning and Fairy Tail's reaction is happening here.

Anyway, I'm going to be painfully honest here and say that I think this fic is flawed at its very foundation. The idea of Natsu and Irene having lunch/dinner together is bizarre enough, but the way the narrative goes about setting it up doesn't do the scene any favors. I know there is such a thing as infatuation at first sight, but Irene and Natsu are different enough people that I seriously doubt it would happen between them, nevermind the good rapport they build up relatively easy (especially from Irene's side, since she has a lot of emotional baggage and a very difficult personality that isn't reflected here).

I could see Natsu crushing on Irene hard (mature woman, really really attractive and giving him some attention), but Irene on Natsu? Not without some previous build up, I think. And you know, getting rid of that pesky human-hating thing she has going on too...

Ignore this next part if you don't care for it, but I personally would have set their initial meeting during something more serious. Maybe Natsu busting up a small dark guild and Irene wandering into the area due to curiosity (or because she felt Dragon Slayer magic being used). Then, she could assist Natsu in taking the dark mages down for whatever reason: that would allow Natsu to see some of her real power and her willingness to kill, bringing them into conflict early on, even if Natsu became somewhat infatuated with her.

This could go on a number of ways of course, but Irene is a complex character and establishing the fact she isn't a "good guy" early on would be better.

Well, that's it. Hope it helps in some way.

My opinion is... jump off a cliff.

Lmao, kidding, kidding. Still, seeing as there are so few fics starring Irene (on the character tags, at least. Can't speak for long-running fics that have included her) and interacting with Natsu, I thought I'd leave my impressions so far.

Which aren't exactly good, I'm afraid. The first problem I noticed are the descriptions. I'm not sure how they look on PC since I read it on phone, but for me it was an entire wall of text for something I already knew. It's true that some people might not have read or seen the manga/anime, but they aren't going to be the majority and even then, they can easily google a pic of Irene. My point is, that long description is unnecessary to portray her, especially when it's all dumped together.

A shorter description detailing her main features and clothes in broad strokes would be much better and from there, you could add small details about the rest from time to time to avoid overcharging the initial description. The same goes for Natsu. Most of us already know how the characters look. No need to ground the narrative flow to a halt with a super long and complex description.

Second issue here is Irene herself. I don't know if this changes in future chapters, I'm only reviewing what I've seen so far, but she's acting heavily out of character without any real justification. This is the same woman that sees people as mere bugs to be crushed and with a lot of issues due to her backstory. I'm pretty sure Irene wouldn't act like it's no big deal as seen here. She's definitely not nice enough to apologize and introduce herself like she does, especially if it's someone she doesn't know and not someone like August, who I suppose she'd respect enough to give him such courtesy. In fact, she's acting OOC throughout the entire chapter.

Natsu is strangely subdued here, too (at first, at least). If this was one if the rare emotional moments where he's serious, I could buy it, but he's usually much more rambunctious. I don't think his reaction upon bumping with Irene is one that suits his usual personality, because he'd probably put his foot in his mouth. But maybe that's just me. Also, did Happy sometimes let Natsu go on his own? Because I don't remember and it seems strange to not see him around.

Also, I'm of the opinion that there was a better way to get them to interact than bumping on the street and staring at each other due to some sort of first-sight fascination but you're the author so...

Overall, I'd say you really need a beta reader who can give you their impressions on the chapters before you post them. Or get a new one if you have one already. Just from glancing here and there, I've spotted grammar mistakes and typos all over the chapter and awkward phrasing in several places that could use a touch up, which a thorough editing process after finishing the initial draft should remove.

Honestly and I'm saying this as kindly as possible, in some places this almost feels like a middle point between a rough first draft and a polished chapter ready to be uploaded.

That said, I want to like the premise because there's such a drought of Irene/Natsu that one has to take what they can get. Hopefully, there will be plot happening and not just slice of life - given that Irene is alive, it seems that the Alvarez Empire whole arc is going to happen at the very least.

I'll keep reading, see how things go.

Nice

Haha,
All I'm thinking about is the reaction the guild will have when Mira tells them she found Natsu trying to cook !

Good try, natsu.

Great chapter but too fucking short man. Please gimme more.