amazing storie
it take me two weeks to read everyting but that was so good
hope you don't give up this story

God I love this story nat being back at large is great and the auspicions on Solas are excellent

Very nice

absolutely fantastic. a ship battle. and the ships of the line resurgent in a new world. chills over here. I'm thoroughly enjoying modern(well, more modern than thedas) tech making it's thunderous voice of change heard.

Not bad. I could see how this chapter appears to be rush but take your time and don't let butthurt people like that clown, IncognitoMinerals bring you down or whatever. Honestly, that comment was hilarious to me and shows how childish some people are. This is your fanfic and you do whatever the hell you want with it. If people don't like it, then they don't need to read it, or better yet, they can make there own. Simple as that. Keep doing what you are doing and know that there are some people out here who appreciate your work. Looking forward to the next update.

Very good story one that I hope is written all the way to the end and not abandoned :)

Amazing chapter i can't wait till the next one

Amazing simply amazing this story is so good and only gets better

This story has been dogshit from near start to now, but this really takes the cake. This smooth brain mouth breathing motherfucker comes from the Harry Potter universe and he's talking shit about there being no proof of an afterlife? I'll take "What are ghosts, the resurrection stone, and soul sucking dementors?" for 500, thanks. I can't really overstate this. The soul empirically, provably exists in his universe. Not only does it provably exist, it can be magically manipulated in at least one way we see in canon via the creation of horcuxes.

Do yourself a favor already and just quit wasting time writing fanfiction, when you clearly want to be writing political manifestos advocating the virtues of atheism, cuckoldry, and whatever other stupid zoomer ideology you support.

tl;dr Degenerates like you belong on a cross.

I dont get the atheist bit about no life after death. There are literally ghosts floating around hogwarts,dementors eat souls, that gateway to the afterlife is in the wizards headquarters,voldemort had ghosts of lily and james help harry in the GoF fight,and the resurrection stone is a thing. It's like he just stuck his head in the sand for all of that.

Thanks for the chapter, I liked some of the details you wrote about like Nat being worried about getting pushed from behind by someone.

I would loveeeee a less angsty Nat in the witcher Verse where he's ok with being in that world no regrets and he's a bit darker so using Aks and shit is cool for him he'll give him a pairing like Triss or someone else who's sexy and badass cause let's be honest if your in witcher Verse and your not sexing up woman your doing it wrong

I can't read this anymore, got to chapter 10. I like the MC, but what was done to him as a child that makes him this cold blooded person, not interested in anything. I didn't get the feeling that he was like this in the first chapter, and then suddenly he is cold to and manipulating everyone. Also, if he is 14 years old is he suddenly able to make these connections about everything that's happening in Thedas.
It would be better if he was older, like in his 20's or something, that way you could at least claim that he got jaded by the world.

Really liked this chapter, hope to see an update soon.

This was unfortunately the worst chapter to date. The argument between Nat and Valeyna was poorly planed. For one, they both acted out of character. Nat abandoned his "I'm going to do whatever it takes to survive through this" and somehow got a consious regarding souls out of nowhere. Not only that, he already proved at several occassions that other mages barrier spells doesn't protect against a well placed blasting charm. Still that part I can buy, he isn't as unaffected by all of this as he liked to pretend after all and from what I can understand he's just hiding it beneath mental barriers.

My biggest issue with this whole chapter is regarding Valeyna. She went from boiling, screaming mad to calm and collected, asking followup questions in a heartbeat. No rational being would act like that. And the whole "you dare defy me" just doesn't fit in with her character unless she somehow got an INSANE ego boost while Nat was gone. Since when is he her servant? He is her subordinate in some sense, yes, but not a servant. That makes it insubordination, not defiance.