nice story~ at first I was a little bummed when I discovered this was yaoi, but then I thought 'who cares? serena's obviously gay, so it's fineanyway, nice plot! it's nice what you did with serena, wendy and erza (especially erza, that was really fitting), sad gildarts died, but I guess you can't have everything end up good~ keep up the good work~!

This has been a cracking story and I hope you continue to write it don’t get demoralised by people becoming irate about inconsequential things hope you keep up the good work

With Gildarts how exactly would Natsu and Serena learn about what he tells the Guild? When they left they didn't really say what the quest was only that the council sent them on it and I don't think the council knows about the fact Gildarts encounters Ancolouga in canon.

Ahhhhh dammit well I will wish you well on this fic but I sadly must say goodbye to this and move on to the next ️

I don't remember seeing Natsu and Serena in the relationship tag. if you are going to make this yaoi , do tell us beforehand. Geez

Wait are they gay or brotherly love I’m at a loss on this but other then that great fic

Great impact in theis chapter a great one

I like your story. Though I think you should put page breaks like aor something rather than just a single BOLD word

Sometimes when reading, I didnt realize it and got confused.

It’s a good story so far. A little advice though, when you change places or time, please tell us or put a line in between it, otherwise it would just be confusing

ooh looking forward to the full chapter seems very interesting :)

Great chapter

Can’t wait to see where this goes

Its always a wonder to find a good story. I've always wanted to read a good story with Serena, where he isnt a cocky a-hole.

A few formatting tips. when shifting between locations, such as with erza to natsu, either add a line, or press enter add aand enter again. just some indication that there is a break. Also try adding a line before/after author's notes. and make them bold/italic. so no one gets confused.

keep it up. I am excited for more.

Tip when doing author's notes at the beginning and end of the chapters make sure they're bold and iltaic so it be easier to notice them

I like it but you are rushing things a lot. While i hate the authors who describe every single detail about everything, i will way your fics needs some describing to the characters, the place they are now and how they came to be. Also when you are chaging scenery consider making a line with "- OR _". It helps the reader a lot.