who is susan?

Loved this WHOLE story and i would 10/10 recommend it to other interested in Overlord.
Great writing.

'ol Pervy's underwear! Satisfaction Guaranteed against sudden bladder eruption and soilment when meeting a Supreme One!

Great fic.
I understand others' gripes with the story, but i enjoyed it for what it was.

Is there an update on the sequel? I've read this fic twice now, and still waiting on the continuation.

What a joke of a story! OMEGALUL

P.S. Aura being captured is 100% unbelievable.

All due respect, you ruined this the instant Aura got captured and I assume raped.

A fan sequel to volume 13? Author have you even read the novel or watched the anime? Aura is way too powerful to get captured, she'd see the fight going out of her favor and use the dragon as bait and run or just use the dragon to flee lmao.

Surprise attack? Aura is also a scout, not to mention Ainz is way too paranoid to send her out with one fucking dragon. Author, you clearly don't understand Overlord whatsoever. The grammar is fine the concept is even good but you fucked it right up in the very first chapter. Anyone who likes overlord or even watches it ain't gonna agree that's even possible.

Zesshi herself wasn't their to capture her and she's possibly the only one other than a world item that could stop them. Not the mention all the magical buffs and items she's wearing. Then even if she was captured, you had her raped(I assume), one of any overlord fans favorite characters, bruh? Do you have a talent for pissing people off? lmao.

I'm gone, I regret ever starting this..

Took me a few days to finish this but I thought it was extremely well done, though it was a little darker than stories I normally read. I did think it was ironic that your author note at the end here claims you tried to mimic the style of a light novel. Unlike almost all light novels, this story actually came across as well written, with well developed characters and normalized dialogue. Higher quality than any light novel I've ever seen, though the bar isn't exactly set very high for those books.

I do wish that the ending had a little more oomph as this last chapter seemed more like a direct continuation of the last chapter than an actual epilogue. Would have liked a few paragraphs explaining what the plan was in regards to completing the takeover of the world, and the Guardians plan to try and break into other words as was hinted at. Would have liked a small blurb about what happened to the other kingdoms also. And lastly, would have appreciated an update on the wizard traitor and the knight who had her curse "removed". Just some final follow ups.

But other than that, I thought this was very well thought out. The characters seemed to respond realistically for what they were and for what happened, and it was definitely a satisfying revenge story. Definitely hugely hypocritical on the part of Nazerick, but I mean they're monsters so that's expected I guess.

The one thing I didn't like was how there was kind of an emphasis about how Aura being raped was difficult for *everyone* in Nazerick. It's obviously terrible to have to witness a loved one go though something terrible and self destruct like Aura was doing, i'm not disagreeing there. And I'm pretty sure it wasn't intentional, but some of those scenes kinda came across like you were trying to downplay what happened to Aura. Kind of like, "yes, what happened to Aura is terrible, but it's terrible for *all* of us and we'll get through this together", as if Momonga, Aura and the others were victims as well.

Also not really sure I loved the ritual at the end. On the one hand it was satisfying to some extent. On the other, it definitely feels like a bit of a easy fix, if that makes sense. I don't want to say it detracted from what happened, but I wanted to see Aura conquer the feelings of inadequacy and weakness she was having, to power through this on her own merits. She's definitely a strong character and I think it would have been great to see her return even stronger. Maybe that would have made the timeline for the story too long, but I think it would have been more satisfying. Considering that the entire story was revolving around that incident, a magical solution felt too simple.

But anyway, other than those two complaints I think the story was otherwise really entertaining. Thanks for writing!

This was masterfully written and I could see it as being one of the actual light novels, so bravo to you! I look forward to seeing where you go with your next volume.

While I did enjoy your story overall, I have a few criticisms.

1. It feels like the Theocracy got off too easy. The entirety of the Re-Estize kingdom was burned to the ground for stealing a single grain shipment. The consequences of raping a guardian would probably be something downright apocalyptic. There is no reason why a single one of the zealots behind the Theocracy's membership would be alive or uncaptured.

2. The side-story going on with Philip and the Re-Estise kingdom felt superfluous and unnecessary. The dialogue with Sebas and the Elf King tied into the main story. The goings-on in the Falling Kingdom did not.

3. Some parts in the beginning and middle dragged on somewhat. While it did ultimately lead to a satisfying climax, I'd advise against padding segments that do not directly impact the main plotline.

Other than that, this was overall a fun read. While I noticed a few grammatical errors, they were mostly minor and easily overlooked.

I look forward to seeing future works from you.

Goofballs. I love them.

Happy June!

Lol...I find it funny how Ainz spared the people of Theocracy...he had Mare kill 9 million people from Re Eztise because they attacked a Sorcerous kingdom carriage

You nade the Theocracy stronger...The original author already stated that there's no threat to Nazarick...it is the strongest in the new world and will always be...Ainz just dont know yet...and Albedo's weapon is a World item...an anti-matter at that...

Goddammit...I skipped through Victim's lines...Ive only just realized that the reversed lines mean something else...

Done reading thorugh this since starting yesterday. This is probably enough to show that I enjoyed this quite a lot. Sacrificing some sleep was well worth it. Even though I am a little bit queazy and unhappy about using the rape of child...it was a great story. The quality is high, and story interesting and entertaining. I sincerly thank you for creating and sharing this and wish you best, dear author. Stay safe and healthy!

Uhhh...Author u made the characters rape Aura. Of course you should’ve seen it coming.
Yet your saying that you pity her?!
Lol, you made this scene happen.
You have no right to actually pity her!