Fucking hell this needs some work it’s utter garbage.

I'm afraid I bounced off of this. The punctuation and miscellaneous other mistakes would be easy to fix with someone to proofread for you, but they've really taken me out of things. You need to especially brush up on when to use apostrophes in general - you're using them in situations where they aren't appropriate, like to pluralize words - and how to punctuate dialogue, where you're skipping commas and capitalizing dialogue tags when you shouldn't.

one of the main reasons that itachi did what he did, was danzo using his eye on him. without that, he should not be fooled that easily into killing his family...

.. this was the thing i hated... he was attacked. in his room and almost killed- and he allowed himself to be blackmailed. he is not a child. thats just stupid.
you say that there will be no leaf bashing. but the very fact that you are having him be blamed for being attacked and defending himself is in fact bashing of sorts.

Why do you rationalize for the Hokage so often? The same point of "this is evil, but I get it" is paraphrased A LOT, that and talking about your lack of caring. The reader gets it after the first few times, especially if you read your other works.

hey I am getting married next week can I have ur women for a test drive

That is a lot of sighing

u know what stop writing fan fiction and write porn BL coz u love to suck cock anything for cicks how can u be a SI with no pride suck on cocks dont become q ninja kai become a who're that will pay better for a job

No leaf village bashing? They just bashed themselves in this chapter. Imagine being considered the bad guy when the guy that was trying to kill you, and almost did, is literally in your room in an orphanage, caught trying to kill a 7yr old. Also all Kai had to do was say that Minota left a clone in the seal mindscape and that it was the one altering the seal to allow more through to heal him. It would have also provided him excuse for all those jutsu he just learnt AND he could use those jutsu to prove that he really did meet Minato.

this story is full of plot and world problems, as well as grammer and punctuation ones. you need a dedicated beta. i was able to skip massive portions of text and whole chapters without losing any comprehension of what was happening. which means that the majority of this story is non-contributory filler.
my suggestionis to go over to darklordpotter and get some help. this story has potential, but it feels under utilized.

absolutely nothing about this makes any sense. 2 ninjas tried to kill him. he defended his life. and the hokage is stupid enough to threaten him with punishment? after all that talk about dealing with threats before they are threats he should be putting his every thought into gaining the jinchurrikis loyalty, not giving him reasons to hate the leaf for unjust persecution!

why would he need bandages? your bit where you described gamers body as not showing any damage massively contradicts anybody actually seeing the wounds and therefore treating them.

I'm hoping you will eventually explain why the fuck the kai's mom was there when kushina was giving birth since the entire point of the secret birth cave was to keep kushina hidden so minato could ensure the kyuubi absolutely did not get free. therefore there is no reason for a second mother as the plan was for kushina to continue as the village jinchurriki.

do you just not know how to use a comma? or what a run on sentence is? do you proof read?
you need to reread your work for grammer and syntax. or get a beta. because there are a mountain of grating mistakes that make reading this difficult.

i was wondering why I stopped this ff at chapter six. Now I know why. Chapter six was a complete mess. the writer had other good fictions, but this seems to be really forcing shit...