This is Awesome! You can do it! Go for it!

This is beautiful I really hope you keep writing in the same fluffy line!

It's good! You should give yourself more credit, it's really good.

You know, I won't say that this is bad, because it isn't. On the context of most fanfictions out there, this one hits the better 50%.
No grammar mistakes and your vocab fine, considering I'm no good either.
But about the scenery, imagine a really, really bad cartoon, where there are only a few frames per whole minute, not pretty, right? Due to this being Hurt/Comfort fiction, you should work more on integrating people into your mind, to feel the wave.
About Marco by the way. If you wanted to write him with OC-ish traits, mention it in the description of your work, this short piece has shown how far off you are already. He might say that, but only reasoning within himself.
And about no fire, are you sure about that? I mean, if you don't want to improve then yeah, sure, keep asking for safe mode. If you are willing to improve though, then ask for all the fire possible, so you could see the room available for improvement.

Cute. Fluff. Love it.

well this was surprisingly good but please dont tell me this is the end because you should get better at writing stuff and ive been thinking of writing my own fanfic so i would like some tips and what you thought about when writing and again plz make a follow-up

it's a cute start